Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-31

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The chart here shows the ratio of australian men and women in diffrent group of age who regularly workout in 2010.

The amount of activity done by the people is divided in to 6 age groups,where the people from the age of 15 to 24 are the only group where the ratio of tghe males is higher then the females being 52.8% to 47.7% whereas the age group from 25 to 65 and over the ratio of the women doing physical activity is higher compared to the men .we can see the most active group of age is 35 to44,45 to 54 and 55 to 64. these are the highly physically active age group where women being the most prominent in there being 52.5% to 53.3%where the men in the same age group are in 39.5% to 45.1%. we can see the most compition happening in the age group of 65 and above because the ratio is very close being 46.7% for men and 47.1% for women this is very commendable for people of this age group to be his much physically active .

in conclusion , the women in australia at the year of 2010 were more activly working out physically then the men which is a very inspiring thing.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You identify the main comparison accurately: men have the higher figure only among 15–24-year-olds, while women lead in the other five groups. You also select relevant details, including the close results for people aged 65 and over and the higher female figures in the middle age groups. However, the overview is not fully precise: calling 35–64 the “most active” age range overlooks that the male peak is among 15–24-year-olds, and the female peak is 45–54. The conclusion that women were more active overall is broadly supported by the chart, but the response would be stronger with a clearer overview of the contrasting trends and more systematic reporting of how male activity changes across age groups. Some selected points are therefore more fully explained than others.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable overall structure, moving from an introduction to comparisons and then a conclusion. The age-group comparisons are generally presented in a sensible order, and phrases such as “whereas” and “in conclusion” help signal relationships between ideas. However, most of the analysis is packed into one long paragraph, so the main overview and supporting details are not clearly separated. Several links are also awkward or unclear, particularly “these are the highly physically active age group where women being the most prominent in there.” The repeated use of “we can see” makes the progression somewhat mechanical. Use a separate overview paragraph, group the data into clear comparisons, and choose more precise referencing and linking expressions.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “physical activity,” “age group,” “ratio,” and “prominent,” and the reader can generally understand the comparisons you intend. However, some choices are imprecise or informal for describing chart data: “ratio” is used where “percentage” or “proportion” is more accurate, and “competition” does not describe a comparison between two figures. There are also noticeable spelling and word-form errors, such as “diffrent,” “tghe,” and “activly,” alongside unnatural phrases such as “the amount of activity done by the people.” Aim for accurate, conventional chart language and check spelling carefully. A more controlled range of terms for increases, decreases, peaks, and differences would make the report more precise.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including comparisons with “whereas” and clauses introduced by “because.” However, some long sentences are not controlled successfully, and punctuation makes their structure difficult to follow. For example, the sentence beginning “The amount of activity done by the people” runs through several comparisons without clear sentence boundaries. There are also errors in agreement and sentence construction, as in “these are the highly physically active age group” and “women being the most prominent.” Capitalisation and comma spacing are inconsistent, and the conclusion contains an awkwardly formed sentence. Practise dividing comparisons into complete sentences, checking subject–verb agreement, and using commas and full stops to make clause relationships clear.

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