Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-31

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The bar chart compares the percentage of Australian men and women taking part in regular physical activity in 2010 across six age groups.

Overall, Females recorded higher proportion than males in doing physical activities for all age groups except for young individuals of age 15 to 24. Participation rates for men declined with age for young adults, which increased steadily for the males after the age of 45. In contrast, females demonstrated progressive increase for all age groups.

Younger males of age 15 to 24 showed a percentage of 52.8, higher than that of females (47.7%). For females of 25-34 years, the proportion surged to 48.9% and for the males of this age, the proportion experienced a dramatic decrease and drops down to 42.2%. Female participation rates consistently increased and reached to 52.5% for women of 35-44 years of age3 and its highest point 53.3% for 45-54 aged females. Conversely, the men showed a lowest participation rate 39.5% for men of 35-44 years of age and increased gently for older generation with 43.1

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You identify the chart’s subject and give a relevant overview: women had higher participation in every group except ages 15–24, while men’s rate fell and then rose. The figures you report for the younger groups and the male low point are accurate. However, the overview is not fully precise: female participation does not increase throughout, as it edges down from 53.3% among 45–54-year-olds to 53.0% and then 47.1% in the older groups. The account also stops before completing the comparison for men aged 55 and over and does not report the final female figures. Covering these later groups and describing the full trend would make the response more complete and better supported.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a clear overall shape, moving from an introduction and overview to comparisons by age, and linking contrasts with phrases such as “In contrast” and “Conversely.” This makes the main comparison easy to follow. Some progression is less effective because the overview says female rates increased across all age groups, while the later data show a peak followed by a decline. The final paragraph also ends abruptly after “43.1,” leaving the older-age comparison unfinished. Organise the details into a complete sequence—perhaps younger groups first, then the middle and older groups—and use clear transitions between those stages. This would make the cohesion less dependent on repeated contrast markers and improve the sense of completion.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.5

You use an adequate range of task-related vocabulary, including “participation rates,” “proportion,” “declined,” and “increased,” and the meaning is generally clear. There is also some variety in how you describe changes. To show more precise control, avoid combinations that sound unnatural or overstate the data: “surged” is too strong for the modest rise to 48.9%, and “reached to” is not a natural collocation. “Progressive increase for all age groups” is also imprecise because the female rate falls in the final groups. The phrase “older generation” is less suitable than a direct age-group label. More measured, chart-specific wording would strengthen the already adequate range.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

You use both simple and complex forms, including the overview’s contrast between men and women and the sentence beginning “For females of 25–34 years.” Most relationships remain understandable, but some grammatical errors reduce accuracy. For example, “Females recorded higher proportion” needs an article, and “which increased steadily for the males” has an unclear reference and awkward clause structure. In “the proportion … drops down,” the tense shifts from past reporting to present; “reached to” also has an incorrect grammatical pattern. The phrase “35-44 years of age3” contains a distracting stray character, and the final sentence is incomplete. Check articles, tense consistency, clause references, and sentence endings during revision.

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