Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-11-01

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The bar chart illustrates the percentage of Australian mn and women, Who doing regular physical activity on 2010.

Overall; both men and men physical activity increased steadly on 2010. While the Female has the highest percentage at the end of period.

Looking at the; Percentage of men on physical activity through age 15 to 24 has 52.8 which was the highest percentage in chart. Although,From age 25 to 34 it was 42.2% aand again decreased on the age of 35 to 44 up to 39.5%which was the lowest percentage of men. Therefore, again the percentage was increased 4.4% on the age of 45 to 54 and the 45.1% on 55 to 64 age. Futhermore, the age of 65 and over it was 46.7%

In terms of female it was 47.7% on the age of 15 to 24, While the age of 25 to 34 it was decreased and become 48.9%. Moreover, 52.5% of female at the age of 35to44 and during the age of 45to54 it was 53.3% which was the highest percentage on women. From the age of 55 to 64 and 65 to over it was constantly decreased and become 47% on female.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You report several accurate figures, including the male peak of 52.8% among 15–24-year-olds, the male low of 39.5% among 35–44-year-olds, and the female peak of 53.3% among 45–54-year-olds. However, the overview is unclear and contains a major trend error: activity did not increase steadily for both sexes. Male participation fell before rising, while female participation generally rose to middle age and then fell. The comparison that women exceeded men in most age groups is also missing. Some details are inaccurate or imprecise: female participation rose from 47.7% to 48.9%, rather than decreasing, and the final female figure was 47.1%. A clearer overview and more accurate comparisons would make the report more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, and separate sections for men and women. This gives the reader a basic route through the information, and phrases such as “Looking at” and “In terms of female” signal a change of focus. However, progression is weakened by unclear or mechanical linking, including “Although” and “Therefore” where the relationships between points are not logical. The overview’s “both men and men” also makes the comparison difficult to follow. Grouping the data around the main trends—men’s initial decline and recovery, and women’s rise and later fall—would create a more coherent account. Check punctuation around linking phrases and avoid unnecessary semicolons.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some relevant chart vocabulary, such as “percentage,” “highest,” “lowest,” “increased,” and “decreased,” so the main subject is generally understandable. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, which makes parts of the report awkward. For example, “men on physical activity” and “the percentage was increased” do not express the data naturally; “participation in physical activity” and “the figure rose” would be more idiomatic. “Constantly decreased” is also unsuitable for describing the female figures, which first rise and then fall. Spelling errors such as “steadly” and “Futhermore,” along with “mn,” reduce accuracy. Aim for precise trend verbs and check spelling before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt some longer sentences and use past-tense forms to describe the 2010 data, but grammatical control is inconsistent. Errors in sentence structure and verb forms sometimes make the meaning hard to follow, as in “both men and men physical activity increased” and “the age of 25 to 34 it was decreased and become 48.9%.” There are also problems with articles, prepositions, and punctuation, for example “on 2010,” “at the age of 15 to 24,” and the misplaced semicolons and commas. Most statements follow similar simple patterns, so the range is limited. Practise accurate comparative sentences, such as “The figure for women rose from … to …, whereas the male rate fell.”

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