Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-11-01

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The supplied bargraph depicts the pecerntage of individuals australians male and females of differents age groups in regular physical activity by 2010 so we will discuss the different changing proportions.

firstly, the highest ratio of physical activity is among 45 to 54 years old womens where as the lowest exercise is done by 35 to 44 age group of mens.

As it is explicitly observed that from 15 to 24 year boys regurlarly excercise 52.8% where as same age group girls does 47.7%. on other hand 25 to 43 year old womens do 6 7% more exercise than their age group of mens which is closely to 50% same as 35 to 44 age women have also 10.2% more than mens.

However, The age group of 45 to 54 females had done more exercise than boys which had a 10% difference. same as 55 to 64 year women have also more percentage than mens which is 53 and 45.1 of males. lastely the 65 or above individuals have approximately same percentage of regular physical activities.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify relevant comparisons, including the male peak in the youngest group and the female advantage in most other groups. The figures for ages 15–24 and 55–64 are reported accurately, and you note that the sexes are close in the oldest group. However, the overview is incomplete and partly inaccurate: the highest female rate is actually among 45–54-year-olds, but the overall female peak is 53.3%, while the male low is 39.5% at ages 35–44. The claim that women aged 25–43 exercise “6 7% more” is unclear and uses an age range not shown; the chart gives 25–34, with a 6.7-point difference. Several comparisons are asserted without clear, accurate figures, so the main features are only partly developed.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

There is some organisation: you begin with a general statement, give an overview, and then move through age groups, using markers such as “firstly,” “However,” and “lastely.” This gives the reader a basic sense of sequence. However, progression is not consistently clear because the overview and detail are not cleanly separated, and the final paragraph combines several comparisons in a long, loosely connected sequence. Linking phrases such as “same as” and “on other hand” are repetitive or do not express the relationship precisely. Paragraphing is limited, and references such as “which” and “same age group” can make it unclear which figures are being compared. Grouping the data into male and female trends, or into age ranges, would create a clearer progression.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You attempt task-related vocabulary, including “percentage,” “age group,” “regular physical activity,” and “difference,” so the topic is generally understandable. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, which sometimes makes comparisons difficult to interpret. For example, “highest ratio” is not the natural term for a chart percentage, and “boys” and “girls” are unsuitable for adult age groups. There are also noticeable spelling errors, including “pecerntage,” “regurlarly,” and “lastely,” alongside awkward phrases such as “individuals australians male and females.” Use precise chart language consistently, such as “proportion,” “rate,” “men,” and “women,” and check spelling before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more extended sentence forms, for example, “As it is explicitly observed that…” and the sentence comparing the 45–54 age group. However, complex attempts are often faulty, and errors in agreement, articles, tense, and sentence construction occur frequently enough to make some statements hard to follow. Examples include “women have also 10.2% more than mens,” “females had done more exercise,” and “the 65 or above individuals have approximately same percentage.” The opening sentence also lacks clear grammatical structure, while punctuation and capitalisation are inconsistent. Build comparisons with a reliable pattern, such as “The proportion for women was X%, compared with Y% for men,” and check subject–verb agreement and articles in each sentence.

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