Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-11-02

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The bar chart illustrates the proportion of Australian male and female in different age groups doing regular physical activities in 2010.

Overall, it is clear that age group from 15 to 24 had the highest percentage of male and age group from 45 to 54 had the largest percentage of female, while 35 to 44 ages men and 65 and over ages women had the least proportion doing regular physical activities in 2010.

Age group of 15 to 24, male are more keen than women, male had 52.8% while female had 47.7%. Whereas, 24 to 34 age group women is doing more activities than men. Male had 42.2% and female had 48.9% respectively.

Female group rose gradually, making up 52.5% in 35 to 44 age group and goes up to 53.3% in 45 to 54 ages accounting highest done activities age group. However, men goes from 39.5% in 35 to 44 age group and 43.1% in 45 to 54 age group.

Ages from 55 to 64, female made 53% and male 45.1% while male and female over 65 where likley with 46.7% male and 47.1% female respectively.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You identify the main gender pattern and include relevant figures across all six age groups. The overview correctly notes that men peak at 15–24 and women at 45–54, and the comparisons for 15–24, 35–44 and 55–64 are supported by the chart. However, the overview says women aged 65 and over had the lowest female rate; in fact, women aged 15–24 were lower (47.7% versus 47.1%? The chart shows 47.1% for 65+, so this is the lowest). The overview is therefore accurate on this point, but it could better summarise the broader pattern: women exceed men in every group except 15–24. The final comparison is also unclear, and the 65+ figures are not interpreted. A sharper overview and clearer emphasis on the gender crossover would make the key features more fully developed.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a clear overall structure: an introduction, an overview, and paragraphs comparing the age groups. The sequence from younger to older groups is easy to follow, and linking expressions such as “Whereas” and “However” help signal contrasts. Cohesion is sometimes mechanical or unclear, though. For example, “Whereas, 24 to 34 age group women is doing more activities than men” does not connect smoothly to the preceding sentence, and “male and female over 65 where likley” makes the final comparison difficult to interpret. The paragraph about women’s rise also shifts between past and present forms, which interrupts the flow. Use consistent comparison patterns and clearer references, such as “In the 25–34 group, women’s rate was higher,” to make progression more fluent.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of task-related vocabulary, including “proportion,” “percentage,” “rose gradually,” and “accounting,” and the meaning is generally clear. There are also attempts to vary how the data are described rather than repeating “percentage” throughout. Some word choices and collocations are inaccurate or unnatural, however: “male and female” should refer to “men and women” when describing people, while “more keen” does not precisely describe a higher activity rate. Phrases such as “largest percentage of female” and “highest done activities age group” are also awkward and reduce precision. Spelling errors such as “likley” further affect control. Prefer concise chart language such as “the highest proportion of women” and “the participation rate” to describe the figures accurately.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including a contrast with “while” and a sentence beginning “Whereas.” Most of the data remain understandable, but some grammatical errors recur. Subject–verb agreement is inconsistent in “male are more keen,” “women is doing,” and “men goes”; the chart description should use plural subjects with plural verbs. Articles and noun forms are also problematic in “age group from 15 to 24” and “35 to 44 ages men.” In addition, the sentence beginning “Female group rose gradually” changes from past tense to present tense with “goes up.” These errors do not generally prevent understanding, but they limit accuracy. Practise consistent past-tense reporting and build comparisons with complete, parallel clauses.

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