Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-11-02

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The bar chart illustrats the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Overall, the femal regualr activity is counted is 53.3% the age between 44 to 54 years. the men physical activity is second number as 53% who age between 55 to 64 years. While the age 35 to 44 years men is less regular activity and the femal age 25 to 34 as counted 42.2% in 2010.

Firstly, Australian male there physical activity is 52.8% who age 15 to 24 years. And the regular activity decrease to 42.2% in the age of 25 to 34 years. However, this activity are further decline to 39.5% in the age between 35 to 44%. But during the age 45 to 54 years the regular activity increaseed to 43.1%. Although, at the ent of the period the physical regular activity aas grew up to 46.7% in 2010.

Secondly, the femal regular activity is 47.7% during the age 15 to 24%. While, they are increase to 48.9% in the age between 35 to 44%. And the age between 45 to 54 years the regular activity rise up to 53.3%. Morever, the end of the period is grow down to 47.1% the age 65 years and over.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify the chart’s subject and include several relevant figures, especially the male decline from 52.8% among 15–24-year-olds to 39.5% among 35–44-year-olds, followed by a rise. However, the overview is unclear and contains important misreadings: 53% is the female figure for ages 55–64, not a male figure, and 42.2% belongs to men aged 25–34, not women. The female rate rises from 47.7% to a peak of 53.3% at ages 45–54, but the response gives an incorrect age group for 48.9% and omits the 35–44 female figure. To strengthen the report, state the main contrast accurately—men are more active only in the youngest group, while women lead in the other groups—and select key highs, lows and trends.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a basic structure: an introduction, an overview, and separate paragraphs for male and female figures. This gives the reader some organisation, and sequencing words such as “Firstly” and “Secondly” signal the two series. However, progression is weakened by unclear or contradictory statements in the overview, and some links are mechanical or incorrectly used, such as “Although” before a statement that is not a contrast. Several sentences begin with “And” or “While” without forming clear connections, and references such as “the end of the period” are imprecise for age groups. Organise each paragraph around a clear trend, use accurate comparisons between the sexes, and connect sentences with simpler, more precise transitions.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “percentage,” “decrease,” “decline,” and “increase,” and the reader can generally identify that the figures describe activity rates. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations make the report difficult to follow: “regular activity is counted,” “second number,” and “grew up” are not natural ways to describe chart data. Spelling errors such as “illustrats,” “femal,” and “Morever” also reduce accuracy. Use a consistent set of precise reporting expressions, for example “the proportion of men,” “the rate fell to,” and “reached a peak,” and check spelling before submitting. Avoid repeating “regular activity” when “participation rate” or “figure” is clearer.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt some complex sentence forms, including clauses introduced by “However” and “Although,” but control is limited and errors occur frequently. For example, “the femal regualr activity is counted is 53.3% the age between 44 to 54 years” lacks a clear grammatical structure, while “they are increase to 48.9%” has an incorrect verb form. There are also problems with articles, agreement, and sentence boundaries, as in “Australian male there physical activity is 52.8%.” These errors sometimes make relationships between figures and age groups hard to understand. Build accuracy first with clear subject–verb sentences, then add controlled comparisons using patterns such as “The rate for women rose from X to Y, whereas the male figure fell.”

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