Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-11-02

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The bar chart illustrates the proportion of male and female in Australia with various age groups who do participate in physical activity in 2010.

Overall, it is clear that women were physically active than men in most age groups, The highest participation rate among men was recorded in the 15-24 group. Whereas women reached their highest figure among those aged 45-54.

Looking first at men, approximately 52.8% of those aged 15-24 took part in regular physical activity, compared with 47.7% of women. However, the male figure dropped significantly to 42.2% in 25-34 aged groups, while women slightly rose to 48.9%. Women considerably risen to 52.5% in 52-44 aged groups as compared to men with 39.5%.

In contrast, the percentage of women and men slowly risen to about 43.1% and 53.3% respectively, In the aged group 55-64 female has again accounted for about 53% and male remained at 45.1%. Proportion of both male and women was same at aged 65 and over.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You identify the main comparison—that women were more active in most age groups—and report several relevant figures, including the male peak of 52.8% among 15–24-year-olds and the female peak of 53.3% among 45–54-year-olds. However, some details are inaccurate or unclear: women’s rate at 35–44 is given as “52-44,” and the final claim that the sexes were the same at 65 and over conflicts with the chart (47.1% for women versus 46.7% for men). The overview also omits the notable pattern that men’s rate fell before rising, while women’s generally rose to middle age and then declined. More precise reporting of these trends and figures would make the summary more complete and reliable.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, an overview and paragraphs describing the figures. Comparisons such as “compared with” and “while” help connect the two groups. However, progression is weakened by the shift from describing men to women and then back to both, and the final paragraph’s sequence is difficult to follow: “the percentage of women and men slowly risen to about 43.1% and 53.3% respectively” reverses the chart’s values for those ages. Some linking is also mechanical, and punctuation around “Overall” and “In contrast” creates run-on or awkward sentence boundaries. Grouping the age ranges more consistently and using clear transitions would improve the flow.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of task-related vocabulary, including “proportion,” “participation rate,” “dropped significantly” and “recorded,” and the meaning is generally understandable. There are also attempts at more formal phrasing, such as “accounted for.” Some choices are inaccurate or unnatural, however: “women considerably risen” and “slowly risen” do not express the intended trends idiomatically, while “in 52-44 aged groups” makes the age range unclear. “Male and female” is also less natural here than “men and women.” Aim for precise trend language and standard age-group phrasing; this will make comparisons clearer without requiring more elaborate vocabulary.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, for example, “the male figure dropped … while women slightly rose,” and most of the intended comparisons can be understood. Some grammatical errors remain, particularly with verb forms, agreement and sentence boundaries. “Women considerably risen” and “the percentage … slowly risen” need a finite verb such as “rose” or “increased”; “female has again accounted” is also an awkward tense construction. The overview contains a comma splice after “age groups,” and “Whereas women reached…” is a fragment when separated from the preceding sentence. Check that each sentence has a complete clause and keep verb tense consistent when describing the chart.

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