Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-11-02

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The bar chart compares the rate of devotion to regular physical exercise of Australian men versus women among six age brackets in 2010.

Overall, it is clear that, except for the age group of 15 to 24, females in other age groups do more physical activity than males. In addition, the age group of older males shares almost the same percentage as females.

The age group of 45 to 54 females peaks in their physical activity, accounting for 53.3%, whereas at the same age group, males do 43.1%. At the age of 55 to 64, females' rates of physical activity remain nearly unchanged, dropping by 0.3% and becoming 53%. However, in the same age group, males saw an increase and becomes 45.1%. At the age of 35 to 44, females do 52.5% physical activity; though, at this stage, males were 39.5%.

In the age group of 25 to 34, females' regular physical activity was 48.9%; however, compared to them, males were 42.2%. Furthermore, at the age of 15 to 24, males do regular physical acitivity to 52.8% and females were lower and accounting for 47.7%. Older citizens are similar to each other. Females aged 65 or more account for 47.1%; likewise, males records to 46.7%.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

The response identifies the main pattern accurately: women have higher participation in every age group except 15–24, and the figures for people aged 65 and over are close. It also selects useful comparisons, including the female peak of 53.3% at 45–54 and the male low of 39.5% at 35–44. This gives the report a clear overview and relevant supporting data. To make the account more fully developed, describe the overall movement across age groups: men’s rate falls sharply after the youngest group before rising, while women’s rate climbs to middle age and then declines. The statement that older males share “almost the same percentage” as females is accurate, but could be integrated with a clearer comparison of the two series’ contrasting trends.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction and overview are followed by paragraphs of comparisons, and the age groups are generally easy to follow. Linking expressions such as “Overall,” “However,” and “likewise” help signal relationships. However, the body moves between age groups without a clear organising principle, and several comparisons are presented as separate observations rather than as a progression through the chart. The repeated openings “At the age of…” and “In the age group…” make the flow somewhat mechanical. Grouping the data by trend—for example, describing the male pattern together and then the female pattern, or comparing the youngest and oldest groups before the middle ages—would create clearer progression. Some references, such as “at this stage,” could also be more precise.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

The vocabulary is adequate for describing the chart, with relevant terms such as “peaks,” “dropping,” “increase,” and “accounting for.” The writer also attempts less common phrasing, including “rate of devotion” and “age brackets,” but some choices are unnatural or imprecise for this context. “Devotion to regular physical exercise” suggests commitment rather than the proportion exercising, while “do 52.5% physical activity” is not a natural collocation. There is also a spelling error in “acitivity.” These issues do not prevent the reader from understanding the comparisons, but more precise chart language would improve clarity and control. Prefer expressions such as “participation rate” and “the proportion who exercised regularly,” and use “stood at” when reporting percentages.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

The response uses a mix of simple and more complex sentence forms, including a subordinate clause in “except for the age group of 15 to 24” and a contrast introduced by “whereas.” Most comparisons remain understandable, but some errors in verb form and agreement reduce accuracy. For example, “males saw an increase and becomes 45.1%” shifts tense and does not maintain agreement; “males records to 46.7%” also has an agreement problem. The sentence beginning “At the age of 35 to 44” joins its contrast with a semicolon and “though” awkwardly. Keep the reporting tense consistent, check singular and plural subjects, and use a clear structure such as “whereas males recorded 39.5%.” These revisions would make the varied sentence forms more controlled.

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