Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-11-03

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The bar chart compares the proportion of percentage of Australian men and women in various age groups who did regular physical activities in 2010. Overall, female remained dominant in almost every age group apart from first group.

Initially, younger group had more male about 5% than female who did exercise regularly. In the age group of 25 to 34, percentage of males declined steadily. Consequently, females of this age were more as compared to males. Moreover, percentage of men contineusly declined and reached to 39.5% from 42.2% in the age group of 35 to 44. In contrast, significant percentage of women increased in this age group and even reached it's peak value 53.3%, in the age group of 45 to 54. Whereas, there was a minor rose in the percentage of women. Furthermore, both percentages almost remain same during the age group of 55 to 64. Nevertheless, both men and women above the age of 65 reached almost same value such as 46 and 47, which was a minor difference.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify the broad comparison and give an overview that women recorded higher participation in nearly all age groups, while men led among 15–24-year-olds. You also include several relevant figures, such as men falling to 39.5% at ages 35–44 and women reaching 53.3% at 45–54. However, some details are inaccurate or unclear: women’s peak is described as occurring at 45–54, but the text first links it to the 35–44 group; the chart shows 52.5% at 35–44 and 53.3% at 45–54. The account also says men declined steadily, although their rate rises after 35–44. A clearer overview of the contrasting trends and more precise reporting of these changes would make the summary more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable overall structure: an opening overview is followed by comparisons across age groups, and sequencing expressions such as “Initially,” “Moreover,” and “Furthermore” help guide the reader. The main progression is generally understandable, but some links are mechanical or do not accurately signal the relationship between ideas. For example, “Consequently” introduces the female advantage at 25–34 without explaining the comparison, while “Whereas” begins a fragment-like transition. The sentence about women reaching their peak also makes the age-group reference difficult to follow. Grouping the data into clearer stages—youngest group, middle-age trends, and oldest groups—and using fewer, more precise linking phrases would improve cohesion.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use a reasonable range of task-related vocabulary, including “proportion,” “declined,” “increased,” “peak value,” and “minor difference,” so the main comparisons are usually understandable. However, several word choices and collocations are inaccurate or awkward: “proportion of percentage” is redundant, “female remained dominant” is unnatural for describing rates, and “a minor rose” is not the correct expression. There are also spelling and form errors, including “contineusly” and “it's” where the possessive “its” is needed. Aim for precise chart language such as “the proportion of women,” “women recorded a higher rate,” and “rose slightly.” This would make the vocabulary more natural and accurate without requiring unnecessarily complex wording.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of simple and complex sentences, including comparisons introduced by “whereas” and “in contrast,” and most of the intended meaning can be followed. Some grammatical errors remain, particularly in sentence construction and agreement. For example, “female remained dominant” needs a plural or a more suitable singular subject, and “percentage of males declined steadily” is not supported by the figures and is also awkwardly formed. “Both percentages almost remain same” has an incorrect verb form and is missing an article, while “reached almost same value” also needs an article. The sentence beginning “Whereas” is not a complete independent sentence. Check subject–verb agreement, articles, and tense consistency, and make sure subordinate clauses are attached to complete sentences.

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