Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-11-03

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

the bar chat illuestrates the percentage of Australian man and women in different age groups who did redular physical activity in 2010.

Ovareall, it is clear that the percentage of increase 15 to 54 while it female at loast alluestrates slighly decline additionaly the female had higest number white accountable of 45 to 54 with the accountinf for 53.3

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.0

The response identifies the chart’s subject and attempts an overview, noting that female participation is highest at 45–54, at 53.3%. However, the overview is difficult to interpret and partly inaccurate: male participation does not increase from 15 to 54; it falls from 52.8% to 39.5% before rising, while female participation rises to 53.3% and then declines. No meaningful comparisons across the age groups are developed, and most figures are omitted. The response also contains only 51 words, well below the required 150; eight words copied from the prompt are excluded from that count. To improve, give a clear overview of the contrasting trends and support it with accurate comparisons and key figures.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is a basic attempt to organise the response: an opening sentence introduces the chart, followed by a sentence beginning “Overall,” which signals an overview. These choices provide a minimal structure. However, the overview combines several ideas in a confusing sequence, and the relationship between “increase 15 to 54,” “female,” and “slighly decline” is unclear. The response has no developed body paragraph or progression through the age groups, and “additionaly” does not clarify how the next point connects. Use separate sentences or paragraphs to present the overall trends and then compare the data in a logical order, with clear linking and reference.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses some task-relevant vocabulary, including “percentage,” “age groups,” and “physical activity,” and attempts chart language such as “Overall” and “highest.” However, spelling errors are frequent and sometimes make the message difficult to understand: “chat,” “illuestrates,” “redular,” and “Ovareall.” Several word choices or combinations are also unclear, particularly “percentage of increase” and “with the accountinf for.” Build accuracy with common chart-reporting phrases such as “the proportion of,” “rose to,” “fell,” and “accounted for,” and check spelling carefully. A more precise vocabulary range would help communicate comparisons without relying on unclear wording.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts a complex overview sentence, but grammatical control is limited. In “the percentage of increase 15 to 54 while it female at loast…,” the sentence lacks a clear verb structure and the comparison is not grammatically complete. The phrase “the female had higest number” also has problems with article use and sentence construction, while “with the accountinf for 53.3” does not form a complete clause. The opening sentence is more recognisable as a simple sentence, but the response offers little variety in structure. Practise writing complete subject–verb clauses, for example, “The female figure rose to 53.3% among those aged 45–54,” and use punctuation to separate comparisons.

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