Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-11-03

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.5)

The bar chart illustrates the percentage of Australian men and women in diverse age groups who did daily physical activity in 2010

Overall, women were more active than in most age groups, and the gap was widest among middle aged people. Men were only ahead in youngest group.

Men were most active at ages 15 to 24 at 52.8% compared with 47.7% for women. The figures for men then fell sharply to 42.2% at 25 to 34 and reached it lowest point of 39.5% at 35 to 44. After that it rose steadily to 46.7% among those aged 65 and over.

women figures were more higher and stable throughout the year. They rose slighty to 48.9% at age 25 to 34 and peaked at 53.3 at 45 to 54. They stayed above 52% until age 64, then dropped to 47.1% for the oldest group. The gap between twp sexes was highest at 35 to 44, at 13 percentage points and almost disappeared at 65 and over

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.5

The response selects the main patterns accurately and gives a clear overview: women recorded higher activity in all but the youngest group, while men reached their low point in the 35–44 group. The key figures are generally reported correctly, including the male minimum of 39.5% and the female peak of 53.3%. The comparison that the sex gap was widest at 35–44 is also supported by the chart. However, “women were more active than in most age groups” is imprecise, and “women figures were more higher and stable” overgeneralises: their rates rise to a peak before falling, and the 15–24 figure is below the male rate. More precise overview wording and a clearer account of the female trend would strengthen an otherwise well-supported summary.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 7.0

The response is organised into an introduction, an overview, and separate descriptions of the male and female figures, so the reader can follow the comparison. Sequencing is generally logical: the male figures are traced from the youngest group to the oldest, followed by the female pattern and a final comparison of the gap. Linking expressions such as “After that” and “then” help show changes over time. Some connections are less smooth, however: the final gap comparison is added to the female paragraph without much transition, and “Overall” is followed by an unclear comparison. Use more precise referencing and link the final comparison explicitly to the trends already described. This would make the progression more consistently controlled.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

The vocabulary is adequate for describing a bar chart, with useful terms such as “percentage,” “fell sharply,” “reached its lowest point,” “peaked,” and “dropped.” These choices communicate the main movements and comparisons. However, some word choices and collocations are inaccurate or awkward, including “did daily physical activity” when the chart refers to regular activity, “women figures,” and “more higher and stable.” There are also spelling errors in “slighty” and “twp,” and “throughout the year” is not appropriate for age-group data. Aim for more precise chart language and check spelling and collocation; this would make the description more natural and exact without requiring a much wider vocabulary.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

The response uses a mix of simple statements and longer sentences, including a sequence describing how the male rate fell and then rose. Most meanings remain understandable, but some grammatical errors recur. For example, “it lowest point” needs a possessive form, and “women figures” requires a determiner or a different construction. The sentence “women were more active than in most age groups” is also structurally unclear, while “They rose slighty to 48.9% at age 25 to 34 and peaked at 53.3 at 45 to 54” omits the percent sign after 53.3 and has awkward phrasing. Check articles, possessives, and sentence construction, and use a wider range of accurately controlled complex forms.

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