Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-11-03

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The bar chart compares the proportion of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical exercise in 2010.

Overall, women are in more into physical activity than man all different age group. While men are less active in physical activity.

Starting with 15 years male whom are made up with 52.8 which is the highest point of this chart. While 25 to 35 years men are decreased in a medium range with 42.2to 39.5. After a slightly decline in a mid age it rose a minimal. Men who are 45 to 65 years old are actually active in physical activity , they made t 43.1 to 46.7.

on other side, female whom age start with 15 to 35 are increase a little with 47.7 to 48.9. Women who are 35 to 64 are the highest number of proportion who are involved in physical activity. They made up 53.5, 53.3 and 53 these are the highest number . after that 65 years old women are least active in this activity. they are around 47.1 which is the lowest percentage of female in this graphs.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify the chart’s subject and attempt to describe both sexes, including several relevant figures. However, the overview is inaccurate: women were not more active in every age group, since men led among 15–24-year-olds (52.8% versus 47.7%). The main pattern is that male participation fell to a low of 39.5% at ages 35–44 before rising, while female participation peaked around 45–54 and was higher in the other age groups. Some details are also misreported: the female figure for ages 35–44 is 52.5%, not 53.5%, and 47.1% is not the lowest female figure. Focus the overview on these comparisons and report the values accurately.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a basic sequence, moving from an overview to male figures and then female figures, so the reader can recognise the two main groups being discussed. However, progression within the paragraphs is sometimes unclear. For example, “While 25 to 35 years men are decreased in a medium range with 42.2to 39.5” combines two age groups and does not clearly explain the change. Connectors such as “While,” “After,” and “on other side” are used awkwardly or without a complete, well-linked sentence. Organise the details in clear age-group ranges, use a separate overview paragraph, and link comparisons directly—for instance, explain where women’s rates exceed men’s and where the reverse is true.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant chart vocabulary, including “proportion,” “highest,” “decline,” and “active,” which helps communicate the topic. However, the range is limited and several phrases are repetitive or unnatural, such as “more into physical activity,” “active in physical activity,” and “highest number of proportion.” Some word choices also obscure the intended meaning: “made up” is not a natural way to report a percentage, and “medium range” is vague. Aim for precise, conventional language for describing data, such as “accounted for,” “participation rate,” “fell,” and “rose.” Check word forms and spelling as well, including “graphs” when referring to this single chart.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts some longer structures, but sentence forms are often faulty, and errors can make comparisons difficult to follow. Examples include “women are in more into physical activity than man all different age group,” “male whom are made up with 52.8,” and “After a slightly decline in a mid age it rose a minimal.” These show problems with agreement, articles, verb forms, and sentence construction. Several fragments beginning with “While” also lack a complete main clause. Use straightforward sentences with a clear subject and verb, then practise accurate comparative forms—for example, “The male rate fell from 52.8% to 39.5%, then rose gradually.” Review punctuation and spacing so that figures and clauses are easy to read.

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