Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-11-03

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The bar chart illustrates the proportion of australian men and women in different age categoires who did daily exercise in 2010.

Overall, australain women has more involve in physical activities compare to men. age group of 15-20 has the largest proportion while above 65 recorded as the least

In 2010, males has recorded as the largest as 52.8% while women at 47.7%. whereas in next womens are increasd gradually,while male proportion was decline slightly. In the age of 35 to 44 male was decline and females has seen rose to 52.5%

after thet reached at their peak to 53.3% while at 43.1%

In age of 55 to 64 males are rise slightly whereas women stood nearly constant after both seen a slight decline 46.7% and47.1% respectively in their 65 age

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify the chart’s subject and report several relevant figures, including the male high of 52.8% among 15–24-year-olds and the female peak of 53.3% among 45–54-year-olds. However, the overview is inaccurate: women did not lead in every age group, since men had the higher rate among the youngest group. The claim that ages 15–20 had the largest proportion also misstates the chart’s 15–24 category, and the least-active group is not clearly identified. Several comparisons are incomplete or difficult to interpret. The response is 122 words, below the required 150, which limits the detail available. Give a precise overview, compare the sexes across the age groups, and include the main trends accurately.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has a basic paragraph structure, with an introduction, an attempted overview, and details about the age groups. This gives the reader some sense of how the information is organised. However, progression is difficult to follow because the comparisons are compressed into long, loosely connected sentences. For example, “whereas in next womens are increasd gradually,while male proportion was decline slightly” does not clearly show which age groups are being compared. The final paragraph also moves between figures without consistently naming the relevant group. Use one paragraph for the overview and organise the details in a clear sequence, such as youngest to oldest, with accurate linking phrases and complete comparisons.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “proportion,” “age group,” “peak,” and “decline,” and the meaning is generally recoverable. However, the range is limited and several word-choice, collocation, and spelling errors make the report less clear, such as “more involve in physical activities,” “males has recorded as,” and “after thet reached at their peak.” Some terms are also imprecise: “daily exercise” does not match the chart’s “regular physical activity.” Improve accuracy by using standard chart language consistently, such as “the percentage of women,” “rose,” “fell,” and “remained stable.” Check spelling and choose natural verb-noun combinations before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt to combine ideas using contrast and time-related clauses, but the range of sentence structures is limited and errors are frequent enough to make some comparisons hard to understand. Examples include “women has,” “males has recorded,” and “male proportion was decline,” where subject–verb agreement or verb forms are incorrect. The sentence beginning “In the age of 55 to 64” also lacks a clear grammatical structure, and punctuation is inconsistent, particularly around “whereas” and the figures. Practise forming accurate comparative sentences in the past tense, for example, “The male figure fell to 39.5% among 35–44-year-olds, while the female figure rose to 52.5%.” Use full stops to separate distinct comparisons.

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