Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-11-04

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The bar chart illustrate percentage of Australian men and women is different age groups to check physical activity:2010

Overall the bar chart have age groups and percentage categories gives. The highest one is female age 54 and percentage was 53.3 one and only height the second one height is 64 age and percentage also similar to fist highest but differ r was only .5 bar chart have different percentage and different age of group also in there one group have equal bother gender and percentage 46.1/ 47.1 litter Differents have 56 age but at all similar to each other in group. The lowest bar chart have 39.5 percentage although male age is 35 it’s is really surprising that was rarely happening in real life also anyway

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

You identify the chart’s general subject and attempt an overview, noting a high female figure and the lowest male figure. However, the response reports very little of the main pattern and includes inaccurate or unclear details: the highest value, 53.3%, belongs to women aged 45–54, not “age 54,” while the 65-and-over figures are 46.7% for men and 47.1% for women, not a second value similar to the highest. The claim that one group has equal figures is also unsupported. The response is 126 words, below the required 150, and this limits the amount of relevant comparison provided. To improve, accurately summarise the overall gender pattern and compare the figures across age groups, using selected data to support the overview.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.5

There is an attempt to begin with an introduction and then give an overall summary, so the reader can recognise the intended structure. However, the ideas do not progress clearly: the overview moves from the highest figure to a supposed second-highest figure, then to an unclear claim about equality, and finally to the lowest figure. The long second paragraph contains several unrelated points joined together, and references such as “the second one” and “one group” do not make clear which age group or bar is meant. Organise the response into a brief introduction, a clear overview, and one or two paragraphs comparing age groups. Use explicit labels and figures rather than relying on vague references.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some relevant chart vocabulary, including “percentage,” “age groups,” “highest,” and “lowest,” which helps convey the topic. There are also attempts to describe comparison, such as “similar” and “differ,” but several choices are inaccurate or awkward and make the meaning difficult to follow. For example, “the bar chart have age groups and percentage categories gives” does not express a clear relationship, and “height” is not a natural way to refer to a bar’s value. Spelling and word-form errors such as “fist,” “litter,” and “Differents” also reduce precision. Build a more reliable set of terms for describing proportions, peaks, lows, and differences, and check spelling before finishing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts both simple statements and longer sentences, and the basic meaning of the chart topic is partly recognisable. However, control of sentence structure and agreement is inconsistent. For example, “The bar chart illustrate” needs a singular verb, while “The highest one is female age 54 and percentage was 53.3 one” lacks a clear grammatical structure. The sentence beginning “Overall” also combines several clauses without clear punctuation, making the relationships between ideas hard to understand. Articles and prepositions are often missing or misplaced, as in “in different age groups to check physical activity.” Practise writing short, complete comparisons first, then combine them with accurate linking clauses and punctuation.

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