Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-11-04

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The information below presents the percentages of Australian men and woman with different age groups regarding to their daily physical activity in 2010.

Overall, female with the age range of 45 to 54 do more according to their strength and male with the age of 15 to 24.

To commence with, physical strength is about the activity doing regularly enhance our active power 15 to 24 age a women is not that active but men can do lot of strengthful work like gym in daily routine. Additionally, 25 to 34 girl is more active at this stage of life than boys and same to the extent of 44.

On the other hand, 45 to 54 is the prime age for eveyone wheather it is men or women so women do more than men. In Australia womens are more acheiving than the men at every age female do much more than men. The age where both have same potential it is 65 and next to it.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

The response identifies the broad topic and attempts an overview by noting that women are more active in several age groups and that men lead among 15–24-year-olds. However, the overview is unclear and partly inaccurate: women’s highest figure is for ages 45–54, but the claim that this is the “prime age for everyone” is not supported, and the sexes are not equal at 65 and over (46.7% for men versus 47.1% for women). The account also omits the key overall pattern: men’s participation falls to a low at 35–44 before rising, while women’s rate rises to middle age and then declines. Much of the response discusses strength, gym activity and potential rather than reporting chart data, so the task is addressed only partially. Focus on accurate comparisons and the main trends.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

There is some basic organisation: an opening statement, an attempted overview, and paragraphs introduced by “To commence with” and “On the other hand.” These markers show an effort to group ideas. However, the progression is difficult to follow because the body shifts from age-group comparisons to unsupported comments about physical strength and achievement, without a clear sequence through the chart. References such as “same to the extent of 44” and “The age where both have same potential” are unclear, and “On the other hand” does not introduce a well-defined contrast. Build a simple structure: introduction, overview of the main trends, then comparisons across age groups. Use linking phrases only where they accurately show the relationship between points.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The response uses some task-related vocabulary, including “percentages,” “age range,” “active,” and “daily physical activity,” so the topic is recognisable. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations make the meaning unclear, such as “do more according to their strength,” “strengthful work,” and “same potential.” The repeated use of “more” also does not specify whether the comparison concerns participation rates. Spelling errors such as “eveyone,” “wheather,” and “acheiving” further reduce accuracy. Use precise chart language—for example, “the proportion who exercised regularly,” “higher than,” and “reached a peak”—and avoid adding claims about strength or gym activity that the chart does not show.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts both simple and longer sentence forms, including “Additionally, 25 to 34 girl is more active at this stage of life than boys.” However, control is inconsistent, and errors in agreement, articles, plurals and sentence construction sometimes make the intended comparison hard to understand. Examples include “female with the age range … do more,” “a women is not that active,” and “In Australia womens are more acheiving than the men at every age female do much more than men,” where clauses are joined without clear punctuation. The phrase “same to the extent of 44” is also structurally incomplete. Practise accurate comparative sentences, such as “Women aged 25–34 had a higher activity rate than men,” and separate each main idea into a complete sentence.

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