Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-11-04

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The bar chart compares the percentage of men and women of different age groups in Australia who participated in the regular Physical activity in 2010.

Overall, It is clear that significant number of women participated in the physical activities while, percentage of men participating are camparetively low.Moreover, older people of both genders contributes almost identical proportion

Women recorded a higher participation rate than men in the age group of 45 to 54 at percentage 53.3% campared with 43.1% men. The similar pattern was observed in age group of 35 to 44 and 55 to 64 where women accounted 52.5% and 53% while, comparetively low numbers of men were observed approximately 39.5% .and 45.1. The older population of 65 age or above shows almost similar pattern of workout partcipations women around 47.1 and men slightly lower at 46.7%

The siginificant shift is seen in the age group of 15 to 24 male individuals was contributing more in physcial activity around 52.8% whereas female 47.7%

The female of age 25 to 34 workout more 48.9% while, men 42.2%only.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You cover the chart’s main comparisons and provide an overview: women generally had higher participation, while men led among 15–24-year-olds, and the oldest group was nearly equal. Most figures are accurately reported, including the female peak of 53.3% for ages 45–54 and the male low of 39.5% for ages 35–44. However, the overview’s claim that older people of both genders had “almost identical” proportions is too broad: this is true for the 65-and-over group, but not for ages 55–64, where the gap is 7.9 percentage points. The 25–34 comparison is included but receives little interpretation. Make the overview more precise and highlight the contrasting age trends to develop the key features more fully.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure, moving from an introduction and overview to comparisons across age groups. This helps the reader follow the chart, and phrases such as “The similar pattern was observed” attempt to connect related data. However, the progression is uneven: the 35–44, 45–54 and 55–64 groups are combined in a long sentence, while the 15–24 and 25–34 groups are added separately at the end. Some links are awkward or unclear, particularly “while, comparetively low numbers” and the abrupt full stop before “and 45.1.” Organise the body into clearer comparisons, perhaps grouping the younger ages separately from the older ones, and use linking expressions only where they clarify the relationship.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant chart vocabulary, including “percentage,” “participation rate,” “age group” and “recorded,” and you attempt some variation with phrases such as “significant shift.” However, several word choices and collocations are inaccurate or unnatural, including “contributes almost identical proportion,” “workout participations” and “male individuals was contributing.” Spelling errors such as “camparetively,” “siginificant” and “physcial” are noticeable and reduce the precision expected in a chart summary. Prefer concise, standard expressions such as “the proportion who exercised regularly” and “men had a higher rate.” Check spelling carefully and avoid using “significant” unless the difference is genuinely large.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including comparisons with “while” and clauses introduced by “where.” However, errors in agreement, articles and sentence construction are frequent enough to make some sentences difficult to read. For example, “older people of both genders contributes” has a subject–verb agreement problem, and “Women accounted 52.5%” needs a preposition (“accounted for”). The sentence beginning “The similar pattern was observed” also becomes difficult to control, with a comma splice and a fragment-like ending: “.and 45.1.” Capitalisation and punctuation are inconsistent, as in “Overall, It is clear.” Use shorter, complete sentences and check that each subject has the correct verb and that comparisons are grammatically parallel.

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