Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-11-04

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The bar chart compares the proportion of different age groups of male and female who did regular physical activities in Australia in 2010.

Overall, different age groups of females between 25-64 have more ratio of doing regular physical activities as compared to males ranges between 25-64. While age group of 15-24 teenager to adult group of boys have done more as compared to girls in 2010 whereas elderly group of male and female are on maximum same level with slight difference.

Regarding to males, much physical exercersion has been done by 15-24 age group which is 52.8%, while the age group of elderly people over 65 are second highest which is 46.7%. All other ratios has increased in all other age group of males sightly higher than the other.

As females, significant ratio has been seen in age group of 45-54 which is 53.3% slight difference was seen in 55-64 age group of female

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify the chart’s subject and give a broad overview, correctly noting that women were more active than men across most age groups and that the youngest male group had the highest male figure. However, the overview is imprecise: the 65-and-over figures are close, but not “on maximum same level,” and women’s activity was higher from ages 25–64, not simply across all groups in that range without qualification. The body includes only a few figures and does not report the key female values for the younger and older groups or compare the sexes systematically. The sentence about male rates being “sightly higher than the other” is unclear and does not accurately describe the pattern, since male participation falls and then rises. Develop the main comparisons more fully and accurately.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, and separate paragraphs for male and female data. This gives the reader a basic route through the information. However, progression within the body is uneven: the male paragraph gives two figures but then makes an unclear general statement, while the female paragraph ends abruptly after mentioning the 55–64 group. Linking is also sometimes mechanical or confusing, particularly “Regarding to males” and “As females.” The overview’s comparison of age ranges is useful, but it would be clearer to organise the details around the main contrasts—for example, the youngest group, the middle-age groups, and the oldest group—and use explicit comparisons between men and women.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some relevant chart vocabulary, including “proportion,” “age group,” “ratio,” and “slight difference,” and the topic remains understandable. However, several word choices and collocations are inaccurate or unnatural, such as “more ratio,” “much physical exercersion,” and “maximum same level.” “All other ratios has increased” also uses an unsuitable verb for describing the figures. These choices sometimes make the intended comparison difficult to follow. Aim for precise, conventional language for describing data, such as “the proportion was higher,” “participation peaked,” and “the figures were similar.” Check spelling and word forms as well, especially “exercersion,” and avoid repeating “age group” where a pronoun or concise reference would work.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt some complex structures, including the contrast beginning “While age group…” and the sentence comparing the oldest men and women. However, these attempts are often faulty, and the response relies heavily on simple or incomplete sentence patterns. Examples include “different age groups of male and female,” “All other ratios has increased,” and the unfinished final sentence, “As females, significant ratio has been seen…” Subject–verb agreement, articles, plurals, and sentence boundaries also need attention. For example, the female figure of 53.3% is joined to the next clause without clear punctuation. Build accurate simple sentences first, then add controlled comparisons using structures such as “whereas” and “while,” checking that each sentence has a clear subject and verb.

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