Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-11-04

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The bar chart compares the rate of men and women in Australia participating in a regular physical activity, in 2010.

Overall, the porportion of men at old age was less as compared to the men at young age, whereas most of the women at older age were much active than younger one.

Firstly, it can be seen from graph that men under the age of 24 were more than women at the same age. However, men experienced low participation than women from the age of 25 to 34. Similarly, the number of women engaging in the regular physical acticities significantly rised to 53.5%, which was the highest participation in the australia, in 2010. Additionally, the number of men from the age of 34 to the age of 64 saw slight rise whereas the number of women from the age of 34 to the age of 64 experienced a slight fall. Finally, the figure for both men and women over the age of 65 were nearly equal.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You identify the chart’s subject and give an overview contrasting the age patterns for men and women. You also report several relevant comparisons, including men leading in the youngest group and the sexes being close in the oldest group. However, some details are inaccurate or unclear: the female peak is 53.3% for ages 45–54, not 53.5%, and women’s participation rises from 47.7% to 53.3% before falling slightly; it does not simply rise to a peak without the age group being specified. The overview’s claim that older men were less active than younger men is too broad, since male participation rises after its low at ages 35–44. To strengthen the response, select the key turning points and report the figures and age ranges precisely.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear overall arrangement: an introduction, an overview, and a paragraph that moves through the age groups. Linking words such as “However,” “Similarly,” “Additionally,” and “Finally” help signal comparisons, and the reader can follow the main sequence. This meets the lower-band expectation of coherent organisation and shows some flexibility in connecting points. At times, though, the links are mechanical or do not express the relationship accurately: “Similarly” introduces a rise in women’s figures rather than a parallel comparison, while “Firstly” is followed by several different trends without a clear grouping. Organise the body around the contrasting male and female patterns, and use transitions that make the comparison explicit.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of task-related vocabulary, including “participation,” “regular physical activity,” “slight rise,” and “slight fall.” These choices help communicate the chart’s main trends, and attempts at more formal phrasing are evident. Some word choices and collocations are inaccurate or awkward, however: “the rate of men … participating” is less natural than describing the proportion of men who exercised, and “most of the women at older age were much active” is unclear. There are also spelling and word-form errors, including “porportion,” “acticities,” and “rised.” Use precise chart language consistently, and check spelling and collocations so that the intended comparisons are expressed naturally.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including a contrast with “whereas” and a sentence beginning “Although” is not needed to convey the comparisons. Most of the meaning remains understandable, but some grammatical errors reduce accuracy. For example, “men under the age of 24 were more than women” omits a suitable comparison such as “more active than,” and “the number of women … rised” has an incorrect verb form and awkward subject construction. In “both men and women … were nearly equal,” the figures, rather than the people, should be described as nearly equal. Review comparative structures, subject–verb choices, articles, and sentence punctuation, while retaining your attempts to combine related ideas.

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