Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-11-04

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The bar graph illustrate the proportion of Australia's male and female in various age groups that perform exercise on daily base in 2010.

Overall , ratio of women is higest near to half centery rather than men. Although , the percentage of men remain below in all age stages except at near to younger. However , the ratio is steady same (65 and over) .

It is quite obvious that Australian men and women doing regular physics activity is compared in percentage in 2010 . As the total % is less than 100 and also quite nearly 55% involved in fitness.

However , at the age 15 to 24 women is low proportion than men which is approximately 52.8 and closest to 48 . Feminine remain booster from 25 to 34 onword 55 to 64.

As regard masculine showed close to with a minor difference with almost 1 % that brief girls are more intrested than boys because at the younger , they show off little interest which is only 39.5 , that is lowest all age group.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify the chart’s subject and make a relevant attempt at an overview, noting that women’s participation was generally higher and that men led among the youngest group. However, the overview is unclear and includes inaccurate claims: men were not below women in every other age group, since women exceeded them from ages 25–64 but the figures were nearly equal among those aged 65 and over. The statement that the ratio is “steady same” does not describe a clear trend. Some figures are reported, but comparisons are confused—for example, the youngest women’s rate is described as “closest to 48” without a clear comparison. Focus on the main pattern and accurately summarise the gender crossover and the age-group highs and lows.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has separate paragraphs and uses signposts such as “Overall,” “However,” and “As regard,” so there is an attempt to organise the information. However, the progression is difficult to follow: the second paragraph repeats the chart’s subject rather than developing the overview, and later comparisons do not consistently connect to the point before them. Several linking words are used inaccurately or mechanically, particularly repeated “However,” which makes relationships between ideas unclear. The final sentence combines a comparison, an explanation about interest, and a low figure without a clear sequence. Give the response a simple structure: introduction, concise overview, then two paragraphs comparing the age groups, using clear references to men and women.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant chart vocabulary, including “proportion,” “percentage,” “age groups,” and “approximately,” and you attempt alternatives such as “masculine” and “feminine.” However, the range is limited and several choices are inaccurate or unnatural, which sometimes makes the meaning difficult to understand. For example, “regular physics activity” does not express the chart’s subject, while “remain booster” and “show off little interest” are unsuitable descriptions of participation rates. There are also noticeable spelling errors, including “higest,” “centery,” and “intrested.” Use precise, conventional terms such as “participation rate,” “physical activity,” “higher,” and “lower,” and check spelling and collocations carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt a few complex sentences, including one beginning “Although,” and use present-tense forms to describe the chart. However, sentence structures are often faulty, and errors in agreement, articles, and sentence construction frequently make the comparisons hard to interpret. For example, “The bar graph illustrate” has a subject–verb agreement error, while “the percentage of men remain below” also needs agreement and a clearer comparison. “Although” is used as a sentence connector without completing the expected structure, and punctuation is inconsistent, as in the spaces before commas in “Overall ,”. Practise accurate simple comparison sentences first, then combine them with correctly formed clauses using “while” or “whereas.”

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