Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-11-04

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The bar graph gives information about the percentage of australian males and females in various ages who did exercise regularly in 2010.

overall, the number of females recorded the highest percentage on average than males ,eccept the age group of 15 to 24 where men were in higher position. between the age group of 35 to 44 physical activity was least popular for males.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify the chart’s subject and give a broad overview that women were more active in most age groups, while men led among 15–24-year-olds. However, the response reports almost no supporting data and omits important patterns, including the female peak at ages 45–54 and the male low at 35–44 followed by a gradual rise. The claim that women had the highest percentage “on average” is not clearly supported or explained. Most importantly, the response is 64 words, well below the required 150, so the chart is addressed only minimally and its main features are not adequately summarised. Include a clear overview and several accurate comparisons with figures.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable order: an introductory sentence is followed by an overview, and “overall” signals the shift to the main summary. This gives the reader a basic sense of purpose. However, the ideas are compressed into one short paragraph, with no clear development from the overview to specific comparisons. The phrase “except the age group of 15 to 24” is attached awkwardly to the preceding claim, and the final point about the male low is not linked to the other age-group trends. Use separate paragraphs for the introduction/overview and key details, then organise comparisons by gender or by age pattern. A few clear linking phrases would make the progression easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant basic terms such as “percentage,” “age group,” and “physical activity,” so the topic is generally clear. There is also an attempt to vary wording with “exercise regularly.” However, the vocabulary range is limited, and some choices are inaccurate or unnatural: “males and females in various ages,” “highest percentage on average,” and “in higher position” do not express the comparisons precisely. The spelling error “eccept” and inconsistent capitalisation of “Australian” also reduce accuracy. Aim for standard chart language and precise comparison phrases, such as “the proportion of women exceeded that of men” or “men recorded a higher figure.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

The response uses simple sentence forms that communicate the general topic, and the opening sentence attempts a relative clause with “who did exercise regularly.” However, the range is narrow, and errors in sentence construction and punctuation are noticeable. For example, “the number of females recorded the highest percentage on average than males” has an unclear subject and an incorrect comparative structure; “between the age group of 35 to 44 physical activity was least popular for males” also lacks a clear grammatical frame. Capitalisation and spacing around punctuation are inconsistent, as seen in “overall” and the space before the comma. Practise accurate comparison structures and use a mix of simple and compound sentences to report the data clearly.

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