Band 7.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 7.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-11-04

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 7.0)

The bar chart illustrates the proportion of Australian men and women in various age groups who took part in regular physical excercise in 2010.

Overall, females were ahead of males across multiple age groups except the youngest group where, males were clearly leading. Among the oldest age group both genders were almost identical, but females were slighly ahead with few percentage points.

Males were most active in 15 to 24 age group, at 58.8%. Their lowest figure was 39.5% in the 35 to 44 age group. Among those aged 65 and over, the figures for both genders were almost equal, with males trailing females by only 0.4 percentage points.

Females outperformed males in various age group. The highest figure was of 53.3% in 45 to 54 age group, while the lowest was 47.1% in 65 and over. They were behind in only 15 to 24 age group by 5 percentage points.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You identify the main contrast clearly: women recorded higher activity in most age groups, while men led among 15–24-year-olds, and the oldest group was nearly level. You also select useful highs and lows, including the female peak of 53.3% and the male low of 39.5%. However, one important figure is inaccurate: the male rate for ages 15–24 was 52.8%, not 58.8%. The overview could also report the broader pattern more precisely, such as the male rate falling to 35–44 before rising, while women’s rate generally increased to middle age and then declined. These accurate comparisons and the clear overview are strong, but the data error and partly underdeveloped trend summary limit the response.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 7.0

The response is organised into a clear introduction, overview and two detail paragraphs, and the information progresses logically from the overall comparison to figures for each sex. Linking expressions such as “Overall,” “Among,” and “while” help readers follow the comparisons. The final paragraph also returns to the female figures and identifies the age group in which women were behind. To make the progression more flexible, avoid repeating the same comparison in separate paragraphs: the near-equal rates among people aged 65 and over appear in both the overview and the male paragraph. You could group the age-by-age comparisons together and use clearer references to connect them. Overall, the structure is easy to follow, with some room to make cohesion less repetitive.

Lexical Resource: Band 7.0

You use a suitable range of chart-reporting vocabulary, including “proportion,” “outperformed,” “lowest figure,” and “percentage points.” These choices allow you to describe the data and make comparisons without relying on overly basic wording. Some collocations and forms are less natural, however: “females were ahead of males” and “The highest figure was of 53.3%” could be expressed more precisely as “the female rate was higher” and “the highest rate was 53.3%.” There are also spelling slips in “excercise” and “slighly,” which reduce accuracy. Continue using varied comparison language, while checking spelling and choosing standard terms such as “rate” or “proportion” consistently for percentages.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.5

You use a mix of simple and more complex sentence forms, including the contrast in “Among the oldest age group both genders were almost identical, but females were slightly ahead” and the clause beginning “while the lowest was…”. Most meanings remain clear, and the response is generally easy to understand. Some grammatical control is still uneven: “in 15 to 24 age group” and “in 45 to 54 age group” need an article or a more complete age-group phrase, while “Females outperformed males in various age group” has a plural agreement error. The sentence “The highest figure was of 53.3%” also uses an awkward grammatical construction. More consistent articles and plural forms, alongside a wider range of accurately controlled comparisons, would strengthen the writing.

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