Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-11-04

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.5)

The bar chart illustrates the proportion of Australian men and women in various age groups who took part in regular physical activity in 2010.

Overall, females were ahead of males in all age groups except the youngest group, where males were clearly ahead. Among the oldest group the ratio among both genders was identical, with females led by marginal difference. The gap among both the genders was highest in middle age group.

Males highest figure was 52.8% in 15 to 24 age group, while their lowest was reported to be 39.5% in the 35 to 44 age group. In the 65 and over age group competition seems to be tough among both the genders with males trailed females only by 0.4% points.

Females were ahead in five groups of the six groups in total. The highest proportion was 53.3 in 45 to 54 age group and the lowest was among the 65 and over, which was 47.1%. The biggest gap was among 35 to 44 age group where females were ahead with 13 percentage points.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You identify the main pattern that women recorded higher activity in five of the six age groups, while men led among 15–24-year-olds, and you support this with relevant figures. The male high and low points and the female peak are also accurately reported. However, the overview contains a factual contradiction: you say the oldest group was “identical,” then note that women led by 0.4 percentage points. The largest gender gap is correctly located at ages 35–44, but the comparison would be clearer if you also highlighted the broader trend: men’s rate fell to 35–44 before rising, whereas women’s rose to 45–54 and then declined. This relevant coverage is strong, though some key features are not fully synthesised.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear four-paragraph structure: an introduction, an overview, and separate descriptions of male and female figures. This makes the information easy to locate, and the progression from general patterns to specific data is generally logical. Some linking and reference choices, however, make the flow less precise. For example, “Among the oldest group the ratio among both genders was identical” conflicts with the following sentence, and “The gap among both the genders” is an unclear reference. The final two body paragraphs also repeat that women led in five groups. To strengthen progression, group the data by trend or contrast and use clearer links such as “By contrast” and “Meanwhile,” while avoiding repeated points.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.5

You use a suitable range of chart-reporting vocabulary, including “proportion,” “age groups,” “highest figure,” and “lowest,” and the meaning is generally clear. There are also attempts at less common phrasing, such as “the gap” and “ahead,” but some choices are inaccurate or unnatural for a formal data summary. “Competition seems to be tough” personifies the figures and is too conversational; “the rates were close” would be more precise. “Females led by marginal difference” is also an awkward collocation, and “0.4% points” should be expressed as “0.4 percentage points.” Aim for consistent, neutral language and precise terms for comparisons; this would make the adequate range more flexible and controlled.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

You use both simple and more complex forms, including the relative clause in “the youngest group, where males were clearly ahead” and the comparison “where females were ahead with 13 percentage points.” Most sentences remain understandable, but some grammatical errors and awkward constructions prevent consistently accurate control. For example, “Males highest figure” needs a possessive form (“Males’ highest figure”), while “with females led by marginal difference” has an incorrect verb construction. In “The highest proportion was 53.3 in 45 to 54 age group,” articles are missing, and the figure should be followed by a percent sign. Check possessives, articles, and verb forms, and revise sentences that combine several ideas so their grammatical relationships are clear.

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