Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-11-04

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The bar chart illustrates the proportion of Australian men and women in various age groups who took part in regular physical activity in 2010.

Overall, females were ahead in all age groups except the youngest, where males were clearly ahead. Among the oldest age group the difference was marginal whereas, the highest trailed was noted in the middle age. Among the oldest age group only a marginal difference was observed.

Males were most active in 15 to 24 group, at 52.8%, while the lowest was 39.5% in the 35 to 44. In the 65 and over group a slight margin was noticed with males trailed females only by 0.4 percentage points.

Females were ahead of males in five of the six groups. The peak rate was 53.3% in 45 to 54 group and the lowest rate was 47.1 in the 65 and over. The most significant gap was in 35 to 44 group, where females were ahead with 13 percentage points. However females trailed males by about 5 percentage points in 15 to 24 group.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You identify the main pattern accurately: women had higher participation in five age groups, while men led among 15–24-year-olds. You also report several key figures correctly, including the male low of 39.5% at ages 35–44 and the female peak of 53.3% at ages 45–54. The comparison of the largest gap is relevant, though the 13-point difference is slightly imprecise (the chart shows 13.0 points). The overview is weakened by repetition of the small gap among the oldest group, and “the highest trailed was noted in the middle age” is unclear. To make the summary more complete and precise, describe the overall trends: men’s rate falls then rises, while women’s rises to middle age before declining, and avoid repeating the same comparison.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, an overview and separate paragraphs for male and female figures. This gives the reader a useful basic route through the information. However, progression is uneven: the overview repeats the oldest-group comparison in two consecutive sentences, and the male paragraph introduces the oldest group before the female paragraph returns to comparisons across all groups. Some links are also awkward or unclear, particularly “whereas” in the overview and “However” before the final comparison. Group related comparisons more consistently, remove repeated points, and use linking expressions only when the relationship between ideas is clear. This would create a more coherent progression rather than a sequence of partly overlapping observations.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of task-related vocabulary, including “proportion,” “regular physical activity,” “peak rate,” and “percentage points.” These choices make the subject and most comparisons clear. There are, however, several unnatural or imprecise expressions: “the highest trailed was noted” does not clearly convey the largest gap, and “a slight margin was noticed with males trailed females” is an awkward collocation. “Females were ahead” is understandable but repeated, while “in 15 to 24 group” lacks a natural age-group formulation. Aim for precise chart language such as “the widest gender gap,” “participation rate,” and “women recorded a higher figure.” More natural collocations and less repetition would strengthen the vocabulary.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You use both simple statements and more complex comparisons, for example “while the lowest was 39.5%” and “where females were ahead with 13 percentage points.” Most of the intended meaning remains understandable, but some grammatical errors and punctuation problems are noticeable. In “a slight margin was noticed with males trailed females,” the clause after “with” is not correctly formed; use “with men trailing women” or make it a separate clause. “Whereas” is also incorrectly punctuated in “the difference was marginal whereas, the highest…” and the sentence itself is unclear. Articles are missing in phrases such as “in 15 to 24 group” and “in 45 to 54 group.” Check clause structure, articles and punctuation, especially when combining comparisons.

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