Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-11-05

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The bar graph illustrates the percentage of men and women at different age group who exercised regularly in the year 2010.

Overall, females performed regular physical exercise in majority of the age groups except in one specific age group.

With the percentage of 53.3, age group 45 to 54 has the largest number of females who performed exercise regularly, while the age group 55 to 64 has a second largest number of womens to perform regular exercise with the percent of 53. Womens in the age group of 65 and over has a least number of active womens with the percent of 47.1

Mens on the other hand, has a largest percentage of 52.8 percent who perform physical activity in the age group of 15 to 24, whereas the least number of active men with the percentage of 39.5 percent are in the age group of 35 to 44. As compared to women, most number of active men are even less than the least number of active women in the age group of 65 and over.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify the chart’s subject and give a relevant overview: women recorded higher participation in five of the six age groups, while men led among 15–24-year-olds. You also accurately report several key figures, including the female peak of 53.3% and the male low of 39.5%. However, the account is only partly developed: it omits the male figures for most age groups and does not describe the overall male pattern of falling to 35–44 before rising. The claim that the 65-and-over group has the fewest active women is inaccurate; women’s lowest figure is 47.7% among 15–24-year-olds. Include the main trends and check comparisons against the chart to make the summary more complete and precise.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear overall arrangement: an introduction, a brief overview, and separate discussion of female and male results. Linking phrases such as “Overall” and “on the other hand” help signal the direction of the comparison, and the reader can follow the main points. This organisation is effective, though the body paragraphs read more like lists of selected extremes than a connected account of the data. The final comparison is relevant but could be integrated more smoothly with the preceding figures. To strengthen progression, group the age patterns and comparisons together, and use clear references such as “this figure” or “the female rate” rather than repeating “age group” and “percentage.”

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant chart vocabulary, including “percentage,” “age group,” “regular physical exercise,” and “physical activity,” so the topic is generally clear. However, the range is limited and some expressions are unnatural or imprecise, such as “largest number of females,” “second largest number of womens,” and “least number of active men.” Since the chart reports proportions, “highest percentage” or “lowest rate” is more accurate than “number.” There is also repetition of “performed exercise regularly” and “active.” Aim for concise, conventional data-reporting language and accurate forms such as “women” and “men.” This would make the comparisons more precise and natural.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a range of sentence forms, including a contrast with “while” and a comparison beginning “As compared to women,” and the main meaning is usually understandable. However, errors in agreement, articles, and plural forms recur. For example, “different age group” needs a plural, “females performed … in majority” needs an article or a different construction, and “Mens … has a largest percentage” has problems with both agreement and article use. The sentence about women aged 65 and over also lacks a clear verb structure. Practise building accurate comparison sentences, for example, “Women’s participation peaked at 53.3% among those aged 45–54.” More consistent control of these basic patterns would improve clarity.

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