Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-11-05

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The chart illustrates the proportion of Australian males and females in six distinct age ranges who did physical activities on daily basis in 2010.

Overall, women's accounted for the highest percentage except one age group. However, men's who were 15 to 24 years old showed greater percentage than women's in these activities.

Initially, the males were dominant in just one age group who were 15 to 24 years old 52.8% and women's were 47.7%. The percentage of doing physical activites were 42.2% in males and 48.9% in females who were between age range of 25 to 34. However, physical activities were adopted 52.5% by women's who were 35 to 44 years old and were 39.5% in the same age group in men's.

Furthermore, the females lies between age range of 45 to 54 were highest particiapants in these activties than other any group at 53.3%. However, the proportion of males of the same range group was 43.1%. These activities were played by 45.1% in men's and 53% in women's who were between age group of 55 to 64. Meanwhile, in both gender who were 65 years old or more the pecentage was almost similar 46.7% in males and 47.1 in females.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

The response covers the chart’s main comparisons and gives a clear overview: women recorded higher participation in every age group except 15–24, where men were at 52.8% compared with women at 47.7%. Most figures are reported accurately, including the low point for men aged 35–44 and the near-equal rates among those aged 65 and over. This gives the reader a sound account of the data. To make the overview more fully developed, identify the broader patterns explicitly: women’s rate rises to a peak among 45–54-year-olds before falling, while men’s rate drops after the youngest group and then recovers. The claim that women’s 45–54 group had the highest participation “than other any group” is also too broad, since men aged 15–24 had a slightly lower but comparable rate.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response is organised into an introduction, an overview and two detail paragraphs, and it generally moves through the age groups in a logical order. Comparisons within each age group help the reader follow the data. However, linking words such as “However” and “Furthermore” are used repeatedly, sometimes where a simple transition or direct comparison would be clearer. “Initially” does not signal a meaningful sequence, and “Meanwhile” introduces the final age group without a clear contrast. Some references are also awkward or unclear, particularly “these activities” and “the same range group.” Use more precise links between the trends, and group the figures around the contrasting male and female patterns rather than relying mainly on repeated age-by-age statements.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

The response uses a reasonable range of chart-related vocabulary, including “proportion,” “percentage,” “age ranges” and “participants,” so the main information is understandable. However, several word choices and collocations are inaccurate or unnatural: “women’s accounted,” “physical activities were adopted,” and “activities were played” do not express the intended meaning naturally. There are also noticeable spelling errors, including “activites,” “particiapants” and “pecentage,” alongside inconsistent forms such as “men’s” when referring to men. These issues limit precision and make parts of the description less fluent. Prefer standard reporting phrases such as “the proportion of women,” “engaged in regular physical activity” and “participation rate,” and check spelling and possessive forms carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

There is some variety in sentence structure, including comparisons and subordinate clauses, and the overall meaning is usually recoverable. However, errors in agreement, articles and sentence construction recur. For example, “women’s accounted” has incorrect agreement and possessive form, while “on daily basis” needs an article. In “the females lies between age range,” the verb does not agree with the subject, and the sentence pattern is incomplete. The phrase “who were 15 to 24 years old showed greater percentage” also needs an article before “greater percentage.” These errors do not generally prevent understanding, but they reduce grammatical control. Practise accurate comparison structures, such as “the rate for women aged … was higher than that for men,” and proofread each sentence for subject–verb agreement and articles.

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