Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-11-05

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Write about the following topic: Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

People in this world have different opinions about giving information on certain topics like; scientific research, business, and the academic world. It varies from the need and the requirement. Sometimes it is important to give as much as information and sometimes it is important to just deliver important and useful information.

There are some rules of sharing information and the first thing that sould be noticed is that who is your audience? That is how you evaluate that how much information you should deliver. You understand that how much information can be consumes by at a time and then you decide to share.

However, those people who belive that in academic world, sharing all the information at once is good, they sometimes forget the disadvantage of sharing too much at once. If you are kept on sharing all the information at once and you do not comprehend if your audience is able to take that all at once or not, your information serves no purpose.

Morever, in business this comes into a list of communication skills, if a writter or a speaker does not know the need of the audience and they are just as much as information they can, it is going to be useless for them, on the other hand, speakers and writtter who share information accoding to the need of the audience are mostly being liked.

On the other hand, if I talk about the scientific research, then I agree with the people who says sharing as much as information is important. Because, in scientific resaerch you are sharing information to show your knowlege to your examiner to impress them, so, here sharing as much as relevent and important information is a good approach.

In my opinion, access of everything is bad so, everytime we are about to share some information on any specific topic, we should understand the need of the audience and according to that we should decide that what and how much information is need to deliever. This is how, we can share our information in a useful way that can help others.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You present a general view that information should be shared according to the audience’s needs, and you distinguish between academic/business communication and scientific research. However, the task asks you to discuss whether valuable information should be freely shared, and your response shifts this into how much an audience can absorb. The opposing view—that some information is too important or valuable to share freely—is not clearly explained, and your own position is only fully stated near the end. The claim that researchers share information “to show your knowledge to your examiner to impress them” is not a convincing or relevant example of scientific research. Develop both sides directly, explain the reasons behind them, and support your opinion with a specific example such as commercial confidentiality or open scientific data.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable paragraph structure, and transitions such as “However” and “On the other hand” signal changes in direction. The final paragraph also attempts to bring the discussion together. However, the progression is not consistently clear: the opening introduces sharing information generally, while the body focuses mainly on audience capacity rather than the task’s contrast between open sharing and protecting valuable information. Several sentences repeat the same point about matching information to audience needs, and references such as “that” in “That is how you evaluate” are not always precise. Organise the body around the two views, use each paragraph to develop one main argument, and make links between claims and examples explicit.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “scientific research,” “audience,” “communication skills,” and “relevant information.” However, the range is limited and several word-choice, spelling, and collocation errors make parts of the response difficult to follow. Examples include “consumes by at a time,” “kept on sharing,” “a list of communication skills,” and “access of everything is bad.” There are also repeated misspellings, such as “sould,” “belive,” “writter,” and “resaerch.” Aim for precise expressions connected to the actual debate, such as “disseminate findings,” “protect commercially sensitive data,” and “restrict access.” Proofreading spelling and checking common word combinations would make your meaning clearer.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt a mixture of simple and complex sentences, including conditional structures such as “If you are kept on sharing…” and a contrast introduced by “on the other hand.” However, complex sentences are often faulty, and errors occur frequently enough to make some ideas hard to understand. For example, “how much information can be consumes by at a time” has an incorrect verb form and sentence structure, while “those people who belive … they sometimes forget” has an awkward clause construction. Subject–verb agreement is also inconsistent in “people who says,” and punctuation is often misused, particularly around semicolons and commas. Practise building accurate clauses first, then combine them with clear conjunctions; check agreement, verb forms, and sentence boundaries when proofreading.

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