Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-11-09

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Write about the following topic: Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In contemporary society some individuls believe that resourse sharing is beneficial in research, business, and the acdemic world. While, other believe that some data is too essential or valuable to be hred without any concern.

The three areas of sharing any information is very different. I personaly support that resourse haring is very good but in a certain way such as in acdemic world resourse sharing i very beneficial for every student and it is the basic need of students.

On the one hand, sharing data in business is good but in a very limited way Whereas, in scientific research his/her project information is very confidential so thats why they can't share to any one else. Furthermore, those limiations don't allow both of them scientist and businessman to share any kind of important information to any one else.

On the other hand, in acdemic world resourse sharing is very demanding behaviour from professors toward students. I find this approch is more beneficial in this area only. In conclusion, all perspective have resonable arguments. Nevertheless, after considering that one side which i agreed on it is resourse sharing in acdemic world only. Because this is very important to undertand that sharing any thing in any area firstly have to make limitation and set some boundries to share information then after that share information.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You give a clear, if narrow, opinion: sharing is beneficial in academia, while information in business and scientific research should be restricted. This responds to the topic, but the discussion of both views is only partial and the ideas are under-developed. For example, you say research information is “very confidential” and business sharing should be limited, but do not explain what risks or benefits support these positions. The academic view is also asserted rather than illustrated with a specific example. The conclusion repeats your preference and adds the idea of setting boundaries, but does not resolve the competing arguments in detail. The response is 222 words, below the required 250, which further limits the development of your discussion. Add reasons and relevant examples for each view, then explain your position more fully.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a basic paragraph structure, and phrases such as “On the one hand,” “On the other hand,” and “In conclusion” help signal the intended stages of the discussion. However, the overall progression is not always clear: the second paragraph states your opinion before the two main sides are explained, and the first body paragraph combines business and scientific research without clearly distinguishing their arguments. Some links are mechanical or confusing, as in “Whereas” after a full clause and “Furthermore” introducing a point that is not clearly connected. The final sentence is also difficult to follow because several ideas are joined together. Organise the essay around the two views, use clear topic sentences, and make each sentence’s relationship to the previous one explicit.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some topic-relevant vocabulary, including “scientific research,” “confidential,” “valuable,” and “limitations,” so the reader can identify the subject of the essay. However, the range is limited and several words or phrases are repeated, especially “resource sharing,” “very,” and “information.” Frequent spelling errors—such as “individuls,” “resourse,” “acdemic,” and “limiations”—make the writing less clear and reduce the accuracy of your vocabulary. Some choices are also imprecise: “demanding behaviour” does not naturally express the idea that sharing is valuable or necessary, and “share to any one else” is not an appropriate collocation. Build a more varied set of topic-specific expressions and check spelling and collocations carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt some complex sentence forms, including a contrast with “While” and clauses introduced by “so that,” and the basic meaning is usually recoverable. However, the range is limited, and complex sentences are often faulty. For example, “The three areas of sharing any information is very different” has a subject–verb agreement problem, while “While, other believe” is an incomplete and incorrectly punctuated clause. In “I personaly support that resourse haring is very good,” the sentence pattern is not well controlled, and the final sentence joins several clauses without clear punctuation. There are also errors with articles, plurals, and verb forms. Practise accurate simple sentences first, then add subordinate clauses and contrast structures with careful punctuation.

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