Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Write about the following topic: Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The people believe that it is good to share asd much information as possible in scientific research, some believe some information important and valueable. now started about this topic my openion show the below.

Firstly, that a good idea share information about study and business. In the study case should be shared information is very helpful thje student. when the student study together in the same place.so, Deffinately share another openion and idea. Because when the student share information and thought each other in this case help the each other.

But, some student do not provide information and personal openion. Because they are considered

when will the share information and anythink idea, the next student will achieve the highest marks for me. Mostly, do not share information another.

Secondly, The occuption in business. Mostly, business men people they considere did not share information different company, because this company highly comparision there company.

The scientific research is good, shared information is the good way. when you are the share the thought and openion. They willo help the next person.

But some information is very important and personal do not share random people. Because the people after the time back attack on you. In this time more difficult another people. Therefore, some people considere personal thougjht and information do not share easily.

In my openion overal the view of this easy, do not shared important information random people, Because present time MORE, difficult trust eash other. But will see the acadamic world, My openion, should be help each other.

But in business case should not share information each other.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You address both sides of the discussion and give a personal view: you support sharing in education and scientific research, while arguing that business and sensitive information should be protected. This is relevant to the question, but the response only minimally develops these positions. For example, the concern that another student might “achieve the highest marks” is mentioned without explaining how this relates to sharing research or academic information, and the claim that people may “attack on you” is unclear. Your conclusion repeats your preference but does not resolve the distinction between valuable information and information that can safely be shared. Develop each view with a clear reason and a specific example, and state your overall position consistently.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The response has an identifiable sequence, with paragraphs beginning “Firstly,” “Secondly,” and “In my opinion,” and it attempts to separate education, business, and research. However, ideas are not arranged coherently enough for the reader to follow the argument reliably. The opening is difficult to interpret, and the shift from students to business and then research is abrupt. Several links, such as “Because when the student share information,” do not clearly show how one point supports the next. The final paragraph also moves between academic and business contexts without a clear summary. Use one paragraph for each viewpoint, connect each example directly to its claim, and make references such as “this” or “they” explicit.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some topic-related vocabulary, including “scientific research,” “business,” “information,” “share,” and “personal opinion,” so the general subject is recognisable. However, the range is basic and repetitive, with “share information” and “opinion” appearing frequently, and several word choices or spellings make meaning difficult to understand. Phrases such as “the next student will achieve the highest marks for me,” “highly comparision,” and “attack on you” are unclear or unnatural in context. Build a more precise set of expressions for the two sides of the debate, such as describing information as confidential, commercially sensitive, or beneficial to collaboration. Check spelling and use collocations that express your intended meaning accurately.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt a few longer sentences using words such as “because” and “when,” but most sentence patterns are simple, and the longer attempts are often difficult to follow. Errors in sentence structure and verb forms occur throughout, as in “a good idea share information” and “when the student share information.” Articles, agreement, and punctuation are also unreliable; for example, “the student study together in the same place.so” combines an incomplete sentence with incorrect punctuation. These problems sometimes obscure the relationship between ideas. Practise building complete subject–verb sentences first, then join them with one clear subordinate clause. Review verb agreement and sentence boundaries, and read each sentence aloud to check that it expresses a complete thought.

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