Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Write about the following topic: Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Yes, there are alot people who believe that information should be used in various fields like scientific research, business and academic world to be improved. Other have some different opinion that some information should be keep private from world, but my believe on this as well.

On the one hand, people who thinks that every important information should be used and serve in different fields, because people who attached with scientific research needs alot source for their projects, so its should be benefit for them to not work on specific research that save their alot of time. Mostly in business and academic information where some business owners and students can learn from their source nad be save from loss in their coorporation and exams. Like we should assume that if students can use good sources to learn for their exams rather than full books and assiments, then thay perform good in their exams.

On the other hand, a part of other group of people who thinks that important information should be keep private, because there alot of miss consumption of use full resourses in past, like information that use to be create nuclear bomb that's one of the best example we should be learn from, from their point of view that type of harmful information should be keep private rather than all of use full assiments, tips and tricks for students and business owners.

In conclusion, both groups of people should be right from their prospective because one group wants information is use full assiments and tips for different fields, but other they thinks that harmful source of information should be keep private rather than all and i'm also be with them because harmful information can be used by tarrorists groups rather than only various fields of groups.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address both views and give a personal position: you support sharing useful information while arguing that harmful material should remain private. The examples about students using sources and information related to nuclear weapons are relevant to the topic. However, the discussion is only partially developed. The benefits for scientific research, business and education are grouped together, and the business point about avoiding losses is not explained with a specific example. Your position is also not fully clear at the start: “but my believe on this as well” does not show which view you support. State your opinion directly in the introduction, then explain the benefits and risks with clearer, more developed examples.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable overall structure: an introduction, separate paragraphs for the two views, and a conclusion. “On the one hand” and “On the other hand” help signal the change in perspective, and the ideas generally follow the task’s two-sided structure. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes difficult to follow because several points are joined into long sentences, and references such as “their source” and “that type” are not always clear. The conclusion repeats the two positions but does not resolve them smoothly. Use shorter, more clearly organised sentences, and make each paragraph develop one main point with an example before moving to the next.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some topic-related vocabulary, including “scientific research,” “business owners,” “harmful information,” and “nuclear bomb,” so the reader can identify the subject of your discussion. However, the range is limited and several inaccurate or repeated expressions make parts of the argument harder to understand. For example, “miss consumption” does not clearly express misuse, while “use full assiments” appears to mean useful materials or resources. Spelling errors such as “coorporation,” “thay,” and “tarrorists” also reduce clarity. Build a more precise set of topic phrases and check spelling and collocations; this will help you express the contrast between open access and protecting sensitive information more accurately.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and complex sentences, including a conditional example beginning “if students can use good sources,” and you use linking clauses to explain reasons. However, complex structures are often faulty, and frequent errors in verb forms, agreement, articles and sentence construction can make meaning difficult to follow. Examples include “Other have,” “people who thinks,” “information should be keep private,” and “there alot of.” Some sentences also lack a clear grammatical structure, particularly “because people who attached with scientific research needs alot source.” Practise forming complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, and check agreement and verb patterns. More accurate control of these basics will make your ideas easier to understand.

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