Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Write about the following topic: Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

people who are involved in scientific research, business and the academic world they should be more careful about this type of works.Because when a person try to achieve new things or discover some new project, business they try to complete this very secretly.I think its better for their future.But sometimes when you try to gather more knowledge you have to share your problem or planning so that experienced people can be support them.when you share this then you can relate many other things in your research paper,new business strategy,or your academic world.nowadays internet can play a big role for various types of information.so that people can not depends on the other people.They just search in the internet and gather their knowledge.But if we try to do new something we should try to gain a practical knowledge.In this point of view experienced people help us to build practical knowledge.so when a person try to do any research and business they should gather practical knowledge.for example some countries do not share their research methodology,new business strategy etc because they believe its a therate for their work.so they can't share their strategy freely.They believe that important topic, information,new research are too valuable so they can not share this .so sharing more information it can balanced .we share our information when it is necessary.otherwise we should take a boundaries to share our knowledge, and information.New research paper,new business strategy and academic

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You refer to both sides: keeping research or business plans confidential, and sharing problems so experienced people can offer support. You also give a view that information should be shared when necessary, which is relevant to the question. However, the discussion is only partial: the reasons for protecting valuable information and the benefits of open sharing are not clearly separated or developed with specific examples. The ending is incomplete (“New research paper,new business strategy and academic”), so your conclusion does not fully resolve the discussion. The response is also below the required 250 words; the stated count is 229, with eight words copied from the prompt excluded. Develop each side with a clear reason and example, then finish with a complete conclusion.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is a recognisable movement from confidentiality to the value of sharing knowledge, and phrases such as “But sometimes” and “for example” signal a change or illustration. However, the ideas are not arranged into clear paragraphs, and the response reads largely as one continuous sequence. Several links are unclear or repetitive, including “so that people can not depends on the other people” followed by “They just search in the internet.” The final sentence is unfinished, which interrupts the progression and leaves the argument without closure. Organise the response into an introduction, separate paragraphs for the two views, and a conclusion. Use linking expressions to show the relationship between ideas rather than relying repeatedly on “so” and “but.”

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some topic-related vocabulary, including “research methodology,” “business strategy,” “practical knowledge,” and “valuable,” which helps communicate the subject. The range is nevertheless limited, with repeated use of broad words such as “information,” “share,” and “knowledge.” Some word choices and combinations are unclear or unnatural, for example “do new something,” “a therate for their work,” and “take a boundaries.” These choices sometimes make the intended meaning difficult to follow. Build a more precise set of expressions for the two positions, such as “protect intellectual property” and “share findings openly,” and check collocations and spelling. This would make your ideas clearer without requiring unnecessarily advanced vocabulary.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt to connect ideas using subordinate clauses and reasons, as in “when you try to gather more knowledge” and “because they believe…,” but most sentences rely on simple patterns, and attempts at longer structures are often faulty. Examples include “people … they should,” “when a person try,” and “people can not depends,” where sentence structure, subject–verb agreement, or verb form is incorrect. Articles and punctuation are also inconsistent, as in “a practical knowledge” and the run-together opening “works.Because.” These errors can make parts of the argument difficult to understand. Practise forming complete sentences with one clear subject and verb, check agreement and verb forms, and use full stops to separate ideas.

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