Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Write about the following topic: Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Information plays a very pivotal role in the deverlopment of scientific research, bussiness and academic world. some individuals argue that we must share as much information as we can. on the other hand some people believe that information is very essential and valuable to be shared randomly. in this essay I will discuss both perspectives and present my openion at the end.

on one hand, some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in the scientific research ,bussiness and the academic world so that every one3 can be aware of it and in this way they can get sucess and the world become more developed in addition there b will be no discremination and class difference in the world. for example if the information in the scientific research is shared to every one then all the contries will be able to make their own medications weapons and everything.

on the other hand, some people argue that the information is very important and so valueable to be shared freely as it can cause many hazardous problems if it is freely available to anyone however some individuals can miss use the information for criminal activities in addition in can cause many serious distractions to the world. for example if the scientific business or academic world informatgion is available to anyone freely the criminals can use it against the institutions and create serious situations.

In conclusion i must say that not all information needs to be publicly announced some information must be kept as secret to avoid the crimes and misus

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You address both views and give a clear preference in the conclusion: some information should remain secret to prevent crime and misuse. The examples about sharing medical research and criminals exploiting information are relevant, but they are broad and not explained in enough detail. The benefits of openness are also asserted rather than demonstrated, and the claim that sharing would remove discrimination and class differences is not supported. Your conclusion is very brief and does not fully develop your position. The response is 249 words, one word below the required minimum; 15 words copied from the task prompt were not counted. To strengthen the response, explain the benefits and risks with specific, realistic examples and develop your final judgement more fully.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, one paragraph for each view, and a conclusion. The contrast between the perspectives is signposted with “on one hand” and “on the other hand,” so the reader can follow the basic organisation. However, progression within paragraphs is limited, and several ideas are joined in long strings with “and” or “in addition,” making the relationships between claims unclear. For example, the first body paragraph moves from awareness to success, development, and equality without explaining the links. The conclusion is also abrupt. Use clearer sentence boundaries and organise each paragraph around one main claim, followed by explanation and an example.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some topic-related vocabulary, including “scientific research,” “valuable,” “criminal activities,” and “institutions,” which helps communicate the subject. However, the range is limited and several word-choice, collocation, and spelling errors are noticeable, such as “very pivotal,” “shared randomly,” “serious distractions,” and “misus.” These sometimes make the intended meaning less precise. Repetition of “information,” “important,” and “serious” also limits variety. Aim for accurate, natural combinations rather than adding formal-sounding words: for instance, describe information as being “shared freely” or “made publicly available,” and explain that misuse could “pose security risks.” Proofread spelling carefully, especially in key topic vocabulary.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and complex sentences, including clauses with “so that” and “if,” and the overall meaning is usually recoverable. However, the range is limited, and complex sentences are often faulty or difficult to follow. Examples include “the world become more developed,” where subject–verb agreement is missing, and “if the information … is shared to every one then all the contries will be able,” where the conditional sentence needs clearer punctuation and structure. Sentence boundaries and capitalisation are also inconsistent, as in the lowercase starts after full stops. These errors recur and can make the reader pause. Practise building shorter, accurate sentences first, then combine ideas using correctly formed clauses and punctuation.

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