Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Write about the following topic: Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

According to some people it is beneficial to share as much information as possible in scientific research ,business and the academic world. Many other believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely.

Those who believe that it is good to share as much information as possible is beneficial is a good approach for example if someone gives a information to any of these institute it would become helpful for them in their research or experiment so that is beneficial. In that way your given information is helpful for those institutes in progress of your country .

People who believe that some information is too important to be shared freely is a good thinking in terms of securing your personal information. Because some information is related to your country is confidencial so in that way every information is not possible to given to scientific research ,business and the academic world. In that way you should put your self into a critical situation which nobody wants to do.

Its quiet difficult to give your opinion on any point of view. In my opinion it is a good think to give information to these departments which were working for the welfare of our country. I am happy to give any kind of information to scientists or academic world which should be beneficial for my country in near future however it depends on every person thinking every person thinks or feel according to his enviorment. That is my opinion regarding to this topic

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You introduce both views and give a personal position, saying that sharing information can help research and that you would share information when it benefits your country. However, the discussion is only partial: the benefits are explained mainly as helping institutions with research, while the risks are reduced to protecting personal or confidential national information. These points need clearer, more specific development and relevant examples. Your position is also qualified by “it depends on every person,” which leaves your final view less definite. The response contains 214 words, so it is 36 words below the 250-word minimum; the 41 words copied from the task prompt are not included. Develop each side with a concrete example and state your own view more decisively.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has a basic overall structure: it introduces the issue, discusses sharing, considers reasons for restricting information, and ends with your opinion. Paragraph breaks help distinguish these stages. However, progression within paragraphs is often unclear, and several ideas are repeated rather than connected and extended. For example, “in that way” appears repeatedly, while “so that is beneficial” does not clearly explain the link between sharing and national progress. The opening sentence of the second paragraph is also difficult to follow because it repeats “beneficial” and combines several ideas. Use clearer topic sentences, connect each reason to an explanation or example, and vary linking expressions so the relationships between ideas are easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use enough topic-related vocabulary to communicate the general subject, including “scientific research,” “confidential,” “personal information,” and “welfare.” This shows some awareness of the language needed for the task. However, the range is limited, and several phrases are repetitive or imprecise, such as “give information,” “these departments,” and “a good thinking.” Spelling errors, including “confidencial” and “enviorment,” also reduce accuracy. Some word combinations sound unnatural, which can make your meaning less clear. Build a more precise set of expressions for discussing the benefits and risks of sharing information, and check spelling and collocations when editing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple sentences and longer sentences with reasons and conditions, as in “Because some information is related to your country is confidencial” and “however it depends on every person thinking.” These attempts show an effort to connect ideas, but complex structures are often faulty and can make the meaning difficult to follow. There are also recurring problems with agreement and sentence construction: “Many other believe” and “Those who believe … is beneficial” do not maintain correct subject–verb agreement, while “it is a good think” uses an incorrect grammatical form. Articles and punctuation are also inconsistent, as in “gives a information” and the comma spacing in the opening. Practise building accurate sentences before adding more clauses.

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