Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-11-13

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Write about the following topic: Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

There is an onward debate that some individual trust that sharing all the information for scientific research is valuable while other individual thinks that some data is too much important that we cannot shared it freely. While both perspectives have their own merits. In my opinion, I also believe that some data is too important and we cannot shared it to anyone without authority.

On the one hand, some people believe that we can share any kind of data that is valuable for scientific research. The main reason for this is that scientific research need data to complete their on going experiment. Without any information, they cannot perform experiment and it's never going to be complete in time. For example, if they are going to develop a new medicine formula, they need information of the chemical they are going to use in this process. In addition, some data is valuable for humans like weather forecasting or the data about the roads block and we can share it to anyone without hesitation.

On the other hand, some individuals believe that sharing all the data is risky in some cases. The main reason for this is that some data is not clear or it can cause harm to the living organisms. for example, sharing the method of making acid is too risky because in some cases it is used as a weapon against people. Furthermore, if we are giving information of someone without authority can be harmful for the person who is sharing information like it might be a police case on the person.

In my opinion, I also believe that we cannot share all the information for scientific research or any other person because it's harmful for your own living style, others persons life and developing a crime scenes.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You address both views and state a consistent opinion: some information should be shared for research and public benefit, while sensitive information should be restricted. The examples about developing medicine, weather and road conditions, and harmful uses of acid are relevant to the topic. However, the discussion is unevenly developed. The benefits of sharing are explained through research needs, but the business and academic contexts in the prompt receive little attention. The risks are also asserted more than explored, and the final point about personal information and police consequences is unclear. To strengthen the response, explain who should control access and under what conditions, and develop each example with a clearer link to your position.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear overall structure: an introduction, separate paragraphs for the two views, and a concluding opinion. The signposts “On the one hand” and “On the other hand” help readers follow the discussion, and the examples generally appear beside the relevant claims. This coherent arrangement is a strength. Some connections, however, are mechanical or unclear. The opening sentence is followed by the fragment “While both perspectives have their own merits,” and the final paragraph largely repeats the opinion without drawing the discussion together. Within the second body paragraph, the shift from dangerous information to sharing someone’s information needs a clearer link. Use more precise referencing and transitions to show how each point supports your argument.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use enough topic-related vocabulary to communicate the main ideas, including “scientific research,” “chemical,” “weather forecasting,” “weapon,” and “authority.” However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are noticeably inaccurate, sometimes making the meaning less clear. Examples include “onward debate,” “too much important,” “information of the roads block,” and “developing a crime scenes.” Some terms are also repeated, particularly “data,” “information,” and “share.” Build a more precise vocabulary for discussing access, confidentiality, and research, and check whether words naturally combine in English. More accurate phrasing would make your argument clearer without requiring unnecessarily advanced vocabulary.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and complex sentence forms, including conditional and reason clauses such as “Without any information, they cannot perform experiment” and “if we are giving information of someone without authority…”. However, control is inconsistent, and errors in agreement, verb forms, articles, and sentence boundaries are noticeable. For example, “some individual trust” and “scientific research need” have agreement problems; “we cannot shared it” uses the wrong verb form; and “While both perspectives have their own merits” is an incomplete sentence. Capitalisation and punctuation also need attention, as in the lowercase “for example” after a full stop. Practise checking each sentence for a complete main clause, correct subject–verb agreement, and the appropriate verb form.

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