Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-11-13

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Write about the following topic: Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

People believe that it is beneficial to share as much information about the scientific research,business and the other academic information freely but other people say that

information is too important or too valuable to be share freely so both thoughts are important so in my opnion we need to share the information to everyone about all the important things in this way we can tell everyone the imporatant aspects of every field to everyone like business,science,tech,and other things so it is beneficial for public and for those who dont know about this so these information help people to use in their life so we need to share knowladge to everyone.

Some people believe that information is too important or valuable so do not share it freely to everyone so they are are right on some things or aspects because we have some personal and imporatant information if we share all type of information so it is very dangerous because all information are not for the everyone so we share just that type of information that is helpfull to someone or public in this way we can help them or secure them from disusing of some important information.

On the otherhand people believe that it is benefical if we share all type of knowladge to everyone because the want to tell everyone the reality and those information people dont know so they share information sho is based on the business and the new research by the great scienctists and the share the information about the regular things of the words so they have postive thinking to help people by sharing these things they don't know.

In conclusion i say that we need to share just these type of information that are helpfull or not harmfull so need to share about the bussines,teach,new reseach,and other information that are usefull and we need to don't share that type of information that harm someone's bussines,research,and about someone's life so want to share just usefull and beneficial information to everyone freely in this way we can help and these information don't have any sideeffects to someone's important information or the any other important things.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You address both views and give a personal position: you support sharing useful information while withholding material that could cause harm. The conclusion restates this distinction, so the response is relevant to the question. However, the discussion remains general and the position is not consistently explained: the opening says information should be shared “about all the important things,” while later paragraphs qualify this substantially. Reasons such as helping the public or protecting people are mentioned, but there is no specific example to show how these principles apply in science, business, or academia. Develop each side with a concrete example and explain your own rule for deciding what should remain private. The response also includes 9 words copied from the task prompt.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has separate paragraphs for the opening, opposing view, supporting view, and conclusion, which gives it some basic organisation. However, progression between ideas is difficult to follow: the second and third paragraphs repeat the two positions rather than building a clear comparison, and the opening combines several points in one long sequence. Linking phrases such as “On the otherhand” and “In conclusion” signal transitions, but connections within paragraphs are often unclear, and repeated references to “information” and “everyone” make the writing feel repetitive. Pronouns such as “these information” do not always make the reference clear. Give each body paragraph one distinct purpose, order its reason and example logically, and use clearer referencing and a wider range of accurate links.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “scientific research,” “business,” “valuable,” and “harmful,” and the reader can generally identify your main ideas. However, the range is limited and several words or phrases are repeated, especially “information,” “share,” and “everyone.” Spelling errors such as “opnion,” “knowladge,” “benefical,” and “scienctists” are noticeable and can slow the reader. Some expressions are also imprecise or unnatural, including “regular things of the words” and “disusing of some important information.” Aim for accurate topic-specific collocations, such as “share research findings,” “protect confidential data,” and “make knowledge publicly available.” Proofreading spelling and choosing precise phrases would make your meaning easier to follow.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt to express contrast and reasons using clauses with “but,” “because,” and “so,” and you include both simple statements and longer sentences. However, the range is limited, and many long sentences are joined without clear grammatical control, as in the opening sentence beginning “People believe that it is beneficial…” Several recurring errors affect accuracy: “information is too important … to be share” should use a passive form, and “all information are” has incorrect subject–verb agreement. There are also problems with articles, plurals, and sentence boundaries, for example “for the everyone” and the run-on conclusion. Practise separating ideas into complete sentences and checking agreement, verb forms, and articles. More accurate control of these basics will make your arguments clearer.

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