Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-11-13

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Write about the following topic: Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Few people agrue thart it is benefical to discuse all information related to scientific research, business and the study world. Others have opinion some information is to senstive and crucial it should not shared everyone. In this essay we discuss both views and give my opinion at the end.

On the one hand, everything share with folks may be helpful to solve issues relaed to business and research. Some times they can think another way to recover problem which you have not notice. For example, in previous month my big brother was stuck on math question he did many attempts to solve it but did not when he discuse with me i solved in first attempt. Furthermore, you can get good idea to improve business and research. So, sharing information can creates huge impact on your life.

On the other hand, sharing hiden information with everybody might be not useful. Sometime you are most motivate with your work and business they can demotivate to you with argument of faliure. For instance, last time when i was going for a speech relared to business i share my points with my friend he tell me lots of mistake after his argument i could not represent my properly on stage. Consequently, some time sharing information is not usefull.

In conclusion, although sharing information is helpful it can be useful for improvement in your research business and exam. In my opinion share everything will not play a role in life so we should share with those people which ca

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You address both sides of the discussion and give a personal view, so the response is relevant to the task. The first body paragraph explains that sharing can help people solve problems and improve research or business, while the second presents a risk of discouragement. However, the discussion is only partial: the examples about a maths question and a speech do not clearly show why valuable scientific or commercial information should—or should not—be shared freely. Your position is also not fully clear: the introduction promises an opinion “at the end,” and the conclusion says sharing everything “will not play a role” without explaining what should be shared or with whom. Develop each side with more directly relevant reasons and state a consistent, specific position.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, two contrasting body paragraphs beginning “On the one hand” and “On the other hand,” and a conclusion. This helps readers identify the two views. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes difficult to follow, and links between claims and examples are not always clear. For instance, the speech anecdote is followed by the conclusion that sharing can be unhelpful, but the connection to protecting valuable information is not explained. Some transitions, such as “Furthermore” and “Consequently,” are used mechanically, and the final sentence ends abruptly, leaving the conclusion incomplete. Organise each body paragraph around one clear reason, explain how its example supports that reason, and finish with a complete concluding statement.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You attempt vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “scientific research,” “sensitive,” “crucial,” “improve business,” and “sharing information.” This gives the reader a basic sense of your ideas. However, the range is limited, and frequent spelling errors and inaccurate word choices sometimes make the meaning difficult to understand: “agrue,” “benefical,” “hiden,” and “faliure” are examples. Some phrases are also unnatural, such as “recover problem,” “demotivate to you,” and “represent my properly.” Build a more precise set of topic-related expressions, and check spelling and collocations carefully. For example, use “solve a problem,” “discourage you,” and “deliver my speech effectively” to express these ideas more naturally.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You use some simple sentences and attempt longer structures, including “although sharing information is helpful” and the conditional idea “which you have not notice.” However, the range remains limited, and errors occur frequently enough to make several sentences hard to follow. Examples include “it should not shared everyone,” “sharing information can creates,” and “he tell me lots of mistake,” where verb forms, sentence structure, or agreement are not controlled. The conclusion also breaks off before completing its final clause. Practise accurate subject–verb agreement, verb forms, articles, and sentence boundaries. A clearer version of one idea would be: “Sharing information can have a significant impact because others may suggest solutions that you have not considered.”

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