Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-11-13

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Write about the following topic: Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The world has become a global village and most of the information is available on the internet about scientific research, business and acadmic world. Some information is kept private by special organizations and laws of the world. We will discuss below if this is right to keep some information private or should be shared to the public at any cost.

Science has updated the world to this age and still improving it day by day with a lot of inventions. Everything has been updated in the world from a little household thing to giant inventions and machines. All the new creations have a backgorund of multiple phases including idea, design and development then testing the model in real life. Most of the information shared on internet everyday. It helps people to get more ideas and make them more skilled. This is a good approach for advancement in the real life.

There is some part of information which kept private by it's owners to protect it from others. Countries don't share their specific technologies and data to others. If they do all the countries will built those things by themsleves. So the owner will not get much more benefit when their competetitors already have those technologies. This is also a right thing to do and their is nothing wrong with it.

I have seen the real life example of this. Nowadays Iran is trying to built a nuclear weapon but it don't have much recources and technologies. If this info had been publically available than circumstances would be very different and many countries would have these weapons. So helpful information should be shared publically but there is no harm in keeping some information private to make world more safe and protected.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You address both sides of the discussion and give a clear overall view: useful information should be shared, while some material can reasonably remain private. The explanation that sharing research can help people develop ideas is relevant, and the example of countries protecting technology supports the opposing view. However, the two positions are not developed equally: the benefits of sharing are described quite generally, while the privacy argument receives more explanation. The Iran example also focuses on the risks of nuclear technology but does not clearly explain how this illustrates the broader issue of valuable information in research, business, and academia. To strengthen the response, explain the benefits with a specific example and make the connection between each example and your argument more explicit.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a clear overall structure: an introduction, separate paragraphs for the two views, and a concluding opinion. This makes the main line of argument easy to follow. You also use basic linking expressions such as “There is some part of information” and “So,” to connect ideas. At times, however, the progression within paragraphs is loose: the discussion of inventions moves from household items to development stages and then to sharing without fully explaining each link. Some references, including “this” in the final paragraph, could be more precise about which information or argument is meant. Use clearer topic sentences and connect examples directly to the point they support; vary linking phrases so the organisation feels less mechanical.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use enough topic-related vocabulary to communicate the main ideas, including “scientific research,” “technologies,” “competitors,” and “private.” There are also attempts at more specific language, such as “idea, design and development” and “nuclear weapon.” However, several word choices and collocations are inaccurate or repetitive, which limits precision: “updated the world” is used where “transformed” would fit better, and “built those things by themselves” is imprecise in this context. Spelling errors such as “acadmic,” “backgorund,” “competetitors,” and “recources” are noticeable. Build a more accurate range of topic vocabulary and check spelling, while choosing natural collocations rather than relying on general words such as “things” and “information.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more extended sentence forms, and the meaning is generally understandable. For example, the sentence beginning “All the new creations have a backgorund…” attempts to describe a sequence of stages, while “If they do…” introduces a conditional idea. However, some errors in verb forms, agreement, articles, and sentence construction remain. Examples include “Most of the information shared on internet everyday,” which needs a finite verb and an article, and “it don't have,” where the verb does not agree with its subject. The conditional sentence “If they do all the countries will built…” also has an incorrect verb form and needs clearer punctuation. Practise checking each sentence for a complete verb, subject–verb agreement, and correct conditional structure, while continuing to use varied sentence patterns.

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