Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-11-13
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Write about the following topic: Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
Important informations will or will not share freely. Belivers explain that sharing scientific and other domains inforation is good but others believe different. In my perspective both views are considerable its all depend on the situation. If its going to be a global issue the research will share freely but if it will state's personal win it may not share freely.
Firstly, if any research is made and that issue is present in all the countries then the owner country has to share the research with all the other countries. For example, In 2019 when it was Covid spred widly and people were died in massive numbers and others are at the verge of lossing their life. The countries who made antibodies first share that with the other counteries so, the world can combat with this situation.What if the owner country of antibody or vaccine were not share their research then the whole world must died because of that virus.
Secondly, if someone make a research which is personal for his/her growth then that person will charge to share that infornation with others. For example, if a person make any machine he/she must not share it with others people rather than charge other companies to pay him/her and buy that machine and use it for their own purpose.
In conclusion, everything has a prize wether its a mechine or any other innovation. Safe the world with any research is a good act to safe people but if situation is different then people must charge for their efforts.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0
You address both views and give a position: information should be shared when it concerns a global problem, while individuals may charge for work that benefits them personally. The COVID-19 example is relevant and helps explain the case for sharing research. However, the discussion of the other view is less fully developed: the machine example focuses on payment and ownership, without explaining why valuable business or academic information might reasonably be kept confidential. Your opinion is present, but “it all depend on the situation” remains broad. To strengthen the response, explain the principles behind your distinction and develop both sides with clearer reasoning and more precise examples.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0
The response has a clear overall arrangement: an introduction, two body paragraphs presenting contrasting cases, and a conclusion. “Firstly,” “Secondly,” and “In conclusion” make the main stages easy to identify, and the examples generally follow the points they are intended to support. Some connections are less clear or mechanical, however. The opening sentence, “Important informations will or will not share freely,” does not establish the topic clearly, and the shift from global research to an individual’s machine is abrupt. The long COVID example also combines several ideas without clear sentence boundaries. Use more precise topic sentences and connect each example explicitly to the relevant view.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
You use some topic-related vocabulary, including “research,” “antibodies,” “vaccine,” “innovation,” and “charge,” so the main subject is usually understandable. However, the range is limited and several inaccurate word choices or spellings make the writing less natural: “inforation,” “spred,” “counteries,” and “prize” (where “price” is intended). Some phrases are also imprecise, such as “personal for his/her growth” and “the whole world must died.” Aim for accurate collocations and a wider range of terms for sharing, ownership, and confidentiality. Proofreading spelling and choosing words that express the intended meaning precisely would make your argument clearer.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including conditional ideas such as “if it will be a global issue” and a question used to develop the COVID example. However, control is uneven, and errors in verb forms, agreement, articles, and sentence boundaries sometimes make the meaning difficult to follow. For example, “the countries who made antibodies first share” needs a consistent past-tense verb, while “the whole world must died” has an incorrect verb form. The opening also contains incomplete or unclear sentence structure. Practise forming accurate conditional sentences and checking subject–verb agreement and tense consistency. Breaking long sentences into shorter, correctly punctuated units will improve readability.
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