Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-11-13

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Write about the following topic: Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Some people argue that it is beneficial to provide as much data as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world while Others believe that crucial information cant be offer freely as it contains valuable records .I believe that we can publish the data which is not going to leak the privacy of any project such military data means their assets , information which can harm any institution and goverment policy .

In the modern era we can search anything on the google to write in an article related to out field .For the personal growth it is important to remains updated what is going in the scientific world .As a professional we have to do efforts to gather the data around the world. Once I tried to write an article regarding the future of fossil fuel and i was asking many individual for the data and the knowledge they have and most of them shared a lot of their interesting article .

There are certain limitations in the corporate and goverment secteors due to the compition and the privacy of the goods.In military sector they cant disclose their equipment and itsbl related policies openly. In corporate sector if publish the formula of their product surely many companies will change it and use it for their personal interest . I remember once the spokeperson of the Pakistan military refuse to answer about the nuclear weapons .

As per my opinion we can share that data which is not going to harm any country or relevant authorites.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You present a relevant opinion: information may be shared unless it risks privacy or harms a country or institution. You also discuss reasons for openness, such as professional learning and your attempt to gather material for an article, and reasons for restriction, including military secrecy and commercial competition. However, the two views are not developed evenly: the benefits of sharing are mostly asserted, while the risks receive more explanation. Your position is also expressed in slightly different terms across the response, so its limits could be clearer. The response is 247 words, three words below the required minimum; this leaves little room to develop the examples and reasoning. Explain more precisely what information should be open and why, and support each side with a specific example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a basic paragraph structure: an introduction, a paragraph on the benefits of sharing, one on restrictions, and a concluding opinion. This gives the reader a general sense of the discussion. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes abrupt. For example, the move from searching online to personal growth and then to your article is not clearly linked, and the final paragraph largely repeats the opening position rather than drawing the discussion together. Linking words such as “while” and “As per my opinion” are used, but connections between claims and examples are not always explicit. Use clearer topic sentences, make each example directly illustrate its point, and add a brief concluding synthesis of both views.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some topic-relevant vocabulary, including “scientific world,” “corporate sector,” “privacy,” “formula,” and “nuclear weapons,” which helps communicate the subject. There are also attempts at more specific expressions such as “personal interest” and “future of fossil fuel.” However, the range is limited and several word-choice, collocation, and spelling errors make parts less clear, including “valuable records,” “remains updated,” “compition,” and “relevant authorites.” Some phrases are imprecise, such as “leak the privacy of any project,” where the intended meaning appears to be protecting confidential information. Build a more accurate set of expressions for openness and confidentiality, and check spelling and natural word combinations before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including a contrast in the opening and conditional reasoning in “if publish the formula of their product.” However, the range is limited, and complex structures are often faulty. Errors include “crucial information cant be offer freely,” “it is important to remains updated,” and “if publish the formula,” where verb forms and sentence construction are not controlled. There are also problems with articles, agreement, and punctuation; for example, “Once I tried to write an article … and i was asking” shifts awkwardly in tense, and several sentences run together without clear punctuation. Practise forming complete conditional sentences and check subject–verb agreement, verb forms, and sentence boundaries.

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