Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-11-14

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Write about the following topic: Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Certain individuals argue that it is benificial to share all the information in scientific research, business and the educational world. Whereas, other thinks that some data is very crucial and valuable to be shared with others. This essay will discuss both of these views before concluding why second point is more valid.

There are some people who thinks give all information about your work is good. If you give all your information to every person it will be help others to understand your work or your reserch better and easily. Best example of this is in my master's degree I prepared scientific paper presentation in which I wrote all information about my thesis, and every one told me that, they were very happy with my presentation and it was very easy to understand. Dispite this i disagree with this view.

However, other argue that some data is very crucial for company or their future so never share all the information to everyone. If employ shared all the data or information to other then other companies or people take over you business or ideas, and that company will have to face crises. For instant, there are so many cases available on social media or on news magazines, that some person stolen comapnies pattents and after that, comapny have to faces so many critical situations. That's why i agree with this point.

In conclusion, it is better to shared only basic data of your work or reserch, or never shared all valuable or vital information to everyone.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address both views and state a clear preference for protecting valuable information, especially in the introduction and conclusion. The example of your thesis presentation is relevant to the benefits of sharing, while the discussion of companies losing ideas supports your position. However, the first view is not fully explored: the presentation example shows that sharing can make work easier to understand, but does not explain why broad sharing benefits science, business, or education more generally. The opposing argument is also quite general, and the claim that a company may face a crisis would be stronger with a specific explanation of the harm caused. Develop each side with clearer reasoning and a more precise example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a clear overall structure: an introduction, one paragraph for each view, and a conclusion. The contrast between the body paragraphs is easy to follow, and phrases such as “However” and “In conclusion” help signal the direction of the argument. Some connections are less clear or mechanical, though. “Despite this I disagree with this view” appears at the end of the paragraph supporting sharing, so the shift to your position feels abrupt; explain the limitation that leads you to disagree. The repeated use of “all the information” and “other” also makes links between ideas less precise. Use clearer references and connect each example directly to the point it supports.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some topic-relevant vocabulary, including “scientific research,” “thesis,” “valuable,” “patents,” and “critical situations,” so the main ideas are generally understandable. However, the range is limited and several inaccurate word choices or collocations make the writing less natural, such as “take over you business,” “stolen companies patents,” and “face crises.” Spelling errors—including “benificial,” “reserch,” “comapny,” and “pattents”—are noticeable and reduce precision. Aim to use a wider set of accurate terms for sharing and protecting information, and check spelling carefully. More precise vocabulary would also help distinguish public research findings from confidential commercial information.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including conditional structures such as “If you give all your information…” and “If employ shared all the data…”. However, control is uneven, and errors in agreement, verb forms, articles, and sentence construction occur often enough to make some sentences difficult to read. For example, “other thinks” and “other argue” do not agree with their subjects, while “it will be help others” uses an incorrect verb pattern. The opening “Whereas, other thinks…” is also a fragment rather than a complete sentence. Practise building accurate subject–verb–object sentences first, then add subordinate clauses and check each verb form and punctuation mark.

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