Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-11-14

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Write about the following topic: Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Some individuals believe that it is better to share information in scientific research, buisness an the academic world, whereas others argue that some data is significant and valuable to be shared in publically. Although sharing information with the people have some benefits they can leran from that project, but i believe some information should be private as hackers can use the data wrong way.

Sharing scientific discoveries, buisness idea and the academic world with the public help students to gain more knowledge. They can get idea about the perticular things and they can apply their own life. For example,In bangladesh who have establish successful buisness, if they share their stratigies with the people they can also get idea and can apply their own buisnesses.

However, It can help people to get some new new methods but there are some drawbacks, especially scientific sector, if it share in publically some people can use the things wrong way.

Furthermore, some information sharing with people can be dangerous such as if scientsit share the method how to make weapon that can hamper all the people in the world , some bad people uses the method and it can cause violence in the world. For instance, In bangladesh, scientis share the news with the public, some individuals uses bad way. As a result, I firmly believe that some discoveries should be private.

in conclusion, Although it can benefit certain type of people, i strongly believe that it should be private some discoveries it can create danger in the world.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address both views and state a clear preference for keeping some discoveries private, especially where information could be misused. The examples about sharing business strategies and weapon-making methods are relevant to the topic. However, the discussion is only partly developed: the benefits are mainly described as helping people gain knowledge, while the risks are repeated without explaining how information might be protected or when sharing is appropriate. The Bangladesh examples are also vague and do not clearly show a specific outcome. To strengthen the response, explain both sides in more detail and make your position more precise—for example, distinguish between sharing general research findings and restricting dangerous technical instructions.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, paragraphs presenting benefits and risks, and a conclusion. Linking expressions such as “Although,” “However,” “Furthermore,” and “As a result” help signal relationships between ideas. Nevertheless, progression is uneven: the second paragraph shifts from benefits to drawbacks, and the risk of misuse is then repeated in the next paragraph rather than developed in a clear sequence. Some references are difficult to follow, such as “it” in “if it share in publically.” Organise each paragraph around one main point, use clearer references to the information being discussed, and connect examples directly to the claim they support.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some topic-related vocabulary, including “scientific discoveries,” “strategies,” “weapon,” and “violence,” so the reader can identify the subject of your argument. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, which sometimes makes meaning less clear. For example, “valuable to be shared in publically” does not express the intended idea naturally, and “use the things wrong way” is imprecise. There are also repeated words, including “some” and “idea,” and spelling errors such as “buisness,” “stratigies,” and “scientsit.” Build a wider set of accurate phrases for discussing access, confidentiality, benefits, and misuse, and check spelling carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt some complex sentence forms, including the opening contrast with “whereas” and the concession beginning “Although.” However, these structures are often faulty, and errors occur frequently enough to make parts of the response difficult to read. Examples include “sharing … help students,” “if it share,” and “some individuals uses,” where subject–verb agreement is incorrect. The opening sentence also combines “Although” with “but,” creating an ungrammatical construction. Articles, plurals, and sentence boundaries are inconsistent as well. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then add subordinate clauses; check that each subject matches its verb and that each sentence has a clear, complete structure.

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