Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-07-26

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Write about the following topic: Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

In the modern era of the world, the overall information about All of the fields such as scientific research, technology, new inventions, business, marketing finance, and academic or educational department. These are field information share all the people in the help of the newspaper, television, internet. Moreover, I want to discuss both points of view in sharing ideas of all departments in the public, but some people do not believe to sharing ideas and other information's talk about to all citizens.

The primary reason of the positive description of conveying comprehensive data to all residents. Firstly, the human-being remember all knowledge about the nowadays Scientific research and all financial budget of our country. For example, our state education system distributing into many eligibility criteria, document verification, and fees, but the government wanted to be executing the many scholarships for the students to complete the studies and achieving their goals. Secondly, the geological and ecological environment maintenance and improvement implementing rules for clean and fresh environment, this is main reason to remove the pollution, global-warming, and also, increasing the green planting and fresh air in areas.

In the contrast, some departments working employees does not favor p the introducing to all rules, information, idea and opinion to the public. Moreover, scientific researchers try to make private and secretly the new inventions and discoveries. Furthermore, the government rules of business traders and project information not to publicity and officially to all their content, creation and resources.

In conclusion, the al democracy youth to freedom for understanding and introducing for the information of all fields like that business, education, marketing, research and international deals.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response addresses both sides of the argument, but the development of ideas is limited and often unclear. While you mention the benefits of sharing information (e.g., education and environmental awareness) and the reasons for keeping information private (e.g., research and business secrets), the arguments lack depth and logical connection to the prompt. The conclusion does not clearly state your own opinion, which is a requirement of the task. To improve, ensure each paragraph has a clear topic sentence and that your personal stance is explicitly stated in the introduction and reinforced in the conclusion.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organised into paragraphs, but the progression of ideas is often disjointed. While you use some cohesive devices like 'Firstly', 'Secondly', and 'In conclusion', their usage is sometimes mechanical or inaccurate, such as 'In the contrast' or 'In the modern era of the world'. The referencing is occasionally unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow your line of reasoning. To improve, focus on using transition words more naturally and ensure that each sentence flows logically from the previous one.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is limited and often repetitive. There are several instances of word-choice errors and awkward phrasing, such as 'make private and secretly' instead of 'keep confidential' and 'not to publicity' instead of 'not made public'. Some terms are used incorrectly, which occasionally impedes the reader's understanding. To improve, try to learn collocations (words that naturally go together) and avoid translating directly from your native language. Expanding your range of topic-specific vocabulary related to research and business would also be beneficial.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The essay contains frequent grammatical errors, including issues with subject-verb agreement, sentence fragments, and incorrect word forms (e.g., 'information's talk about to all citizens'). Many sentences are incomplete or lack a clear structure, which makes the writing difficult to follow. There is a very limited range of complex sentence structures, and the ones attempted are often faulty. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction—ensuring every sentence has a clear subject and verb—before attempting more complex grammatical structures.

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