Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-07-28
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Write about the following topic: Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
Illustrate the given information about how much important information to share other people or not . The providing information about this topic as possible in scientific research , business and the academic world . Other believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Especially in this era the information is not a good things to share other people .Because some without giving your permission to share other people easily . That is why some people believe on other person and then lost a personal information . In this case people are freely giving information to other people and then create a lot of problem for other people . For example when a person calling to other man and then saying to her you won prize bone if you want you can also give information about credit card and then i sending you all the money in your bank account. The hacker taking all the money and gone. So that is why other people are not think good to share information other people . Because they are lost too many information and then they are not able to grow again in the fields of technology mostly people are not aware about the scientific society. The scientist also research on this fact they also gain a simple solution about how to control this fact in people . The techniques used for people to aware how to safe way of information used for sharing to other people is possible . In my opinion the best way of sharing information to other people in some cause is good or bad so that is why people are not believe to share information to other person . Because they think we lost personal information in that case people are not share information to other person . In my country some people are giving information to other person without any discussion about lost or benefits . I think we give information to other person in a safe and best way because information about personal work.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response attempts to address the prompt but struggles to maintain a clear focus on the academic and scientific contexts requested. The argument is largely limited to personal data security and scams, failing to discuss the broader implications of information sharing in research or business. The position is inconsistent and difficult to follow, as the ideas are not well-developed or supported with relevant examples beyond a generic anecdote about credit card fraud. The response lacks a structured discussion of both views, resulting in a fragmented argument that does not fully address the requirements of the task.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay lacks logical progression and clear paragraphing. Ideas are presented in a stream-of-consciousness style, making it difficult for the reader to follow the writer's train of thought. Cohesive devices are either missing or used incorrectly, such as the repetitive use of 'Because' and 'So that is why' to start sentences. There is no clear introduction or conclusion, and the lack of transition between sentences makes the overall structure feel disjointed and mechanical. Referencing is often unclear, which hinders the flow of the argument.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is limited and often imprecise, which restricts the ability to convey complex ideas. There is significant repetition of basic words like 'information', 'people', and 'share'. Some word choices are awkward or incorrect, such as 'lost a personal information' instead of 'compromised personal data' or 'calling to other man' instead of 'phishing scams'. The lack of academic or topic-specific terminology prevents the essay from reaching a higher band. The errors in word choice occasionally cause confusion for the reader.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that impede communication. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement, article usage, and sentence structure. Many sentences are fragments or run-on sentences, such as 'The hacker taking all the money and gone.' The range of structures is very limited, relying mostly on simple sentences with incorrect punctuation. While the meaning is generally discernible, the high frequency of errors in basic grammar and syntax makes the writing difficult to read and significantly lowers the overall quality of the response.
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