Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-07-28
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Write about the following topic: Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
It is argued by some that people believe that it is good to share the information as possible in scientific research such as business, academic world etc.Few believe that some information is too important didn't to be discussed at free of cost.
This essay will discuss the key reasons and relevant examples to support my opinion.
Firstly, sharing the information with one another will gives the access to gain the knowledge hace opportunity to learn the new lessons,these type of phenomenon will be in a limited range.Such as if any employee is working in an organisation it should be in the premises only.Mainitaining the confidentiality can reduce the negative information.
Secondly,such kind of facts of various things need to be discussed in the public views in order to let the data could share and public gets familiar with the content these will definitely will be a positive development in the community.There will be no huge negative demands to the knowledge.
For Instance,In China clinical laboratory had find that a virus which is causing from the nails of every human being is more dangerous than the poison snake.This relevant data will definitely get spreads and people gets aware of their health consciousness.Maintains the health and prevent from the illness.
In Conclusion, I strongly believes it is better to share the information than the being confidential which has a positive response and very helpful to the society.
In My opinion i strongly trusts the some relevant data need to be confidential in order to prevent the unwanted doubts in the people life.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response addresses both sides of the argument and provides an opinion, but the development of ideas is limited and often unclear. The arguments lack depth and logical progression. For example, the explanation regarding employees in an organization is vague and does not clearly connect to the broader theme of scientific or business information sharing. Furthermore, the conclusion contains contradictory statements, as you first state that sharing is better, then immediately state that some data should remain confidential. To improve, ensure each paragraph focuses on one clear, well-supported idea and maintain a consistent position throughout the essay.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the flow of ideas is frequently interrupted by awkward phrasing and a lack of clear cohesive devices. While you use transition words like 'Firstly' and 'Secondly', the sentences within the paragraphs do not always follow a logical sequence. Referencing is sometimes unclear, such as in the phrase 'these type of phenomenon', which lacks a clear antecedent. The transition between the body paragraphs and the conclusion is abrupt, and the internal structure of the paragraphs is often disjointed, making it difficult for the reader to follow your line of reasoning.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is limited and often used incorrectly, which occasionally causes confusion. Phrases like 'public views' and 'negative demands to the knowledge' are not standard English collocations and obscure your intended meaning. You rely on basic vocabulary and struggle to express complex ideas precisely. There are also issues with word forms, such as 'find' instead of 'found' and 'spreads' instead of 'spread'. To reach a higher band, focus on learning topic-specific collocations and ensure you use words in their correct grammatical form.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede communication. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'sharing... will gives', 'people gets aware'), article usage, and sentence structure. Many sentences are fragmented or run-on, such as 'This relevant data will definitely get spreads and people gets aware of their health consciousness.' While there is an attempt to use complex structures, they are almost always faulty. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, specifically subject-verb agreement and consistent verb tense usage, before attempting more complex grammatical forms.
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