Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-07-31
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Write about the following topic: Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
Many individuals have faith in sharing all data in scientific research, business and acadmeic world. At the other side many of them didn't want to be the part of that mindset.
In this essay, i am going to discuss both the views and what are my opnion related to this are answered below.
At the starting, there are so many valid opportunties that are going to help all the community. Who believes that giving out excess amount of opportunities to different category workers. It may help out the economic percentage of the overall living areas in the world because science is known as the new technology of man. If we share it with all individuals we are going to get more and more opportunites about a better living standard.
On the other hand, in business more and more suppliers are going to helpout each other so their share should be distributed all over the world because working with faith may help you get better facilitated output.
By this i mean better way of teaching other will make your path easy and helps themself also to dealt all the problem out personally because you have developed the needy things in past.
In my opinion, i would say that it should be better to communicate firstly then after it will become a headache for you in upcoming future. but if we discuss overall ratio of the individuals they are not sharing much information which may helpout others and make their own path only easier but infuture they are going to face difficulties and are going to die with their own personal thoughts without working out with others on them.
To conclude that i would say unless your nature become helpless for others you are going to become a failure in upcoming era.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response addresses both sides of the argument, but the development of ideas is limited and often unclear. While you mention the benefits of sharing information, the explanation is vague, using phrases like 'economic percentage' and 'new technology of man' which do not clearly articulate the advantages. The second viewpoint regarding the risks of sharing is also underdeveloped, relying on abstract concepts rather than concrete examples. Your own opinion is present but lacks a clear, logical connection to the preceding paragraphs. To improve, ensure each paragraph focuses on a single, well-explained point with specific, relevant examples.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the logical progression between ideas is weak. Transitions such as 'At the starting' and 'By this i mean' are used, but they do not effectively link the sentences or paragraphs in a natural way. The referencing is often unclear; for example, it is difficult to follow the argument in the third paragraph because the connection between 'suppliers' and 'distributed share' is not logically explained. Paragraphing is present, but the internal structure of the paragraphs lacks the necessary flow to guide the reader through your argument.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is limited and often imprecise. There are several instances of awkward collocations and word choices, such as 'economic percentage of the overall living areas' and 'nature become helpless'. You rely on basic vocabulary and struggle to express complex ideas accurately. Spelling errors, such as 'acadmeic' and 'infuture', also occur. To reach a higher band, you should focus on using more precise academic vocabulary and ensuring that your word choices accurately reflect the intended meaning in a formal context.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The essay contains a high frequency of grammatical errors, including subject-verb agreement issues ('many of them didn't want to be the part'), incorrect verb forms ('helps themself also to dealt'), and fragmented or run-on sentences. While there is an attempt to use complex structures, these are often faulty and impede the clarity of your message. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with the use of commas and capitalization. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence structures and ensuring subject-verb agreement before attempting more complex grammatical forms.
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