Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-05
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Write about the following topic: Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
A large number of people think about the sharing data if given in scientific research, business and educational global. I believe sharing is not good because sometimes it can be harmful for you.
To commence with, sharing information about your business or research. due to the fact that, people receive information from you and save in their mind. People can misused these things. they can advertise all the data with their name in the market.
For instance, you talk about all your business profit and randomly you tell related bank accounts and passwords maybe he listened carefully, after sometimes he stooled your all money through your passwords.
So, from my percpective, this data is very crucial and valuable. People should to save all the information.
Furthermore, Maybe you have a private company data which is top secrete while your organization trust on you. So, keep the information secure from everybody. close relationships are good but never share the important things.
In conclusion, important things should save in your personal USB.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, which significantly impacts the development of ideas. While you attempt to address both sides of the argument, the discussion is superficial and lacks the depth required for an academic task. You mention the risks of sharing information but fail to adequately discuss the benefits of sharing in scientific or academic contexts, which was a core part of the prompt. The position is clear, but the supporting arguments are underdeveloped and rely on simplistic examples, such as the mention of bank passwords, which is not relevant to the broader context of scientific or business research.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is divided into paragraphs, but the logical progression of ideas is weak. While some cohesive devices like 'To commence with' and 'Furthermore' are used, they are often applied mechanically or incorrectly. The transition between ideas is abrupt, and the lack of a clear structure makes the argument difficult to follow. Referencing is sometimes unclear, and the overall flow is hindered by the brevity of the response and the limited development of the points presented.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary range is limited and often repetitive. There are frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'educational global' instead of 'academic world' and 'stooled' instead of 'stole'. The use of 'misused' as a verb is also grammatically incorrect in this context. The vocabulary is generally basic and does not demonstrate the flexibility or precision required for higher band scores. To improve, you should focus on learning topic-specific collocations related to business and research.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. There are issues with sentence structure, such as fragments ('due to the fact that, people receive...') and incorrect verb forms ('People should to save'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with misused commas and capitalization errors. The range of structures is very limited, consisting mostly of simple sentences. To reach a higher band, you need to practice using complex sentence structures and ensure subject-verb agreement and correct tense usage.
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