Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-06

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Write about the following topic: Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Sharing personal details or any kind of information for research purpose, business and the academic world is very common today. many people believe that it is okay to share such information. While, other says that some details are very sensitive to share easily. In my opinion, as technology evolve so fast there are many risks are also increase so that we can not trust anybody easily to share such information.

First of all, as IT sector grow so fast in recent years crime related to cyber is also increases. People are getting more digitalize and use many digital platform in their daily life, As it more convenient option for them. additionally, they need to save their personal details in that application for use them. And which is a one concern because may some parson try to use our personal information for their on benefits. For example, In may countries citizens become a victim of online credit card fraud where by using there personal details which they previously share on any kind of survey or any application.

Secondly, disclosing personal information related to the person or their work might be create dispute between people, And may show negative impact on person's life.

In conclusion, it might be easy to share information for some people But it is risky in current modern era. so we can n

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, which significantly impacts the development of ideas. While you identify both sides of the argument, the discussion is underdeveloped and lacks depth. The conclusion is incomplete, cutting off mid-sentence, which prevents a full summary of your position. To improve, you must ensure you provide a balanced discussion with sufficient supporting examples for both perspectives and complete your essay with a clear, final thought. The focus is also slightly shifted toward 'personal information' rather than the broader context of scientific and business research mentioned in the prompt.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay uses basic paragraphing to separate ideas, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate (e.g., 'While, other says', 'And which is a one concern'). The progression of ideas is hindered by the incomplete conclusion and some awkward transitions between sentences. To reach a higher band, focus on using a wider variety of linking words and phrases more naturally, and ensure that each paragraph flows logically into the next without relying on repetitive sentence structures.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and often repetitive. You rely on basic terms like 'good', 'share', and 'information'. There are also noticeable errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'digitalize' instead of 'digitized' and 'parson' instead of 'person'. The range is insufficient to express complex ideas about scientific or business research effectively. To improve, try to incorporate more topic-specific vocabulary related to data security, intellectual property, and academic transparency, and pay closer attention to word forms and spelling to avoid distracting the reader.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including subject-verb agreement issues ('crime related to cyber is also increases'), incorrect verb tenses, and punctuation errors. Sentence structures are mostly simple, and attempts at complex sentences often contain errors that impede clarity (e.g., 'might be create dispute'). The incomplete final sentence also demonstrates a lack of control over sentence structure. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, specifically subject-verb agreement and the correct use of modal verbs, before attempting more complex structures.

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