Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-06
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Write about the following topic: Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
In modern era, every people try to develop scientific skills in such field business and education research on it. Some people believe that it is good idea to share information in scientific research for growth. While, other people think information is too important or valuable so we do not have to share it freely because people misuse some personal information. In my point of view, people should have to share their information for our personal and country economy growth.
On the on hand, every people depends on scientific research because it make our work and study more easier and convenient. In addition, it boost our country economy and helpful for every people. For example, in 2019 people are unsafe from corona virus, it became more dangerous for peoples lives, scientific research invented vaccination for it and provide it for peoples safety. Moreover, we have to share each and every minor information to scientific research because your single opinion change every peoples life.
On the other hand, individuals think we do not have to share data because its too valuable and important and some people can misuse it and it become risky for us. For example, if our personal data goes to hackers or some criminals so they use this data in different way and that's why we do not have to share data with any person.
In my opinion, we should have to share our thoughts and data to scientific research for new invention and features.
In conclusion, share details to scientific study is a good idea but we do not have to share it with everyone, we have knowledge whom e are sharing our person data information.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response addresses both sides of the argument and provides a personal opinion, meeting the basic requirements of the task. However, the development of ideas is limited. While you mention the benefits of sharing information (e.g., vaccine development) and the risks (e.g., data misuse), the arguments lack depth and academic rigor. The conclusion is somewhat contradictory, as it suggests sharing is good but then advises against sharing with everyone, which is not fully explained. To improve, ensure that each paragraph provides a more detailed explanation of why information should or should not be shared, rather than just stating the points.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or repetitive (e.g., 'In addition', 'Moreover', 'On the other hand'). Some transitions are awkward, such as 'While, other people think', which is grammatically incorrect and disrupts the flow. The referencing is sometimes unclear, particularly in the conclusion where the sentence structure becomes fragmented. To improve, focus on using a wider variety of linking words and ensure that each sentence logically follows the previous one without relying on repetitive starters.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks the precision and range expected at higher levels. You rely on basic terms like 'good idea', 'important', and 'valuable' throughout the essay. There are also some awkward collocations and word choices, such as 'every people' (should be 'everyone' or 'all people') and 'scientific skills in such field business'. To reach a higher band, you should incorporate more topic-specific vocabulary related to research, intellectual property, and data security, and work on using more sophisticated synonyms to avoid repetition.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text that occasionally impede clarity. Common issues include subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'every people try'), incorrect article usage, and awkward sentence structures (e.g., 'scientific research invented vaccination for it and provide it for peoples safety'). The range of sentence structures is limited, consisting mostly of simple or compound sentences with some errors in punctuation and tense consistency. To improve, focus on mastering basic subject-verb agreement and sentence construction before attempting more complex structures. Proofreading for small errors like 'peoples' vs 'people's' is also essential.
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