Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-07
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Write about the following topic: Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
SOME PEOPLE THINK THAT SHARING INFORMATION IN SCIENTIFIC RESEARCH ,BUSSINESS and the academic world .in contrast some think that some information is confidential that not to be shared freely.
first of all, when it became a issue about general people or citizen of a nation that it is very beneficial to share important information with people. for example during covid time ,many People are Unaware about the pandemic situation. which is important at that time.as a result the information was used to Create awareness.in business purpose ,when sells high for a specific reason or method it will be shared with another bussinessman.as a result they all are benefited for this.in academic world ,ai is increasing day by day and integration of AI can enhance student productivity if its scientifically proven than shared with general people or institute.
on the other hand when is came from confidential thing like covid injection making process that should be hidden from general people.in business , some company hide their special tactics which is totally ok. when it comes to academic world like administrative approach such as question reserved it should be hidden from public.
its totally depends on the situation .
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, which significantly impacts the development of ideas. While the essay attempts to address both sides of the argument, the points are underdeveloped and lack sufficient detail or examples. The introduction is poorly structured and does not clearly outline the scope of the discussion. Furthermore, the conclusion is extremely brief and lacks a well-supported personal opinion. To improve, you must expand on your arguments with specific, detailed examples and ensure you meet the minimum length requirement to allow for a full exploration of the topic.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is divided into paragraphs, but the logical flow is weak. The use of cohesive devices is minimal and often mechanical (e.g., 'first of all', 'on the other hand'). There is a lack of clear progression between sentences, making the argument feel disjointed. The referencing is sometimes unclear, and the overall structure lacks the sophistication required for higher bands. To improve, focus on using a wider variety of linking words and ensure that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence that connects logically to the next.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is basic and repetitive, which limits the ability to convey complex ideas effectively. There are several instances of word-choice errors, such as 'when it became a issue' instead of 'when it becomes an issue' and 'sells high' instead of 'sales are high'. The range of vocabulary is insufficient for a formal academic essay. To improve, you should practice using more precise academic terminology and collocations related to the topics of research, business, and ethics.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains frequent grammatical errors, including issues with subject-verb agreement, article usage, and sentence fragments (e.g., 'when is came from confidential thing'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with irregular capitalization and spacing. The range of sentence structures is very limited, relying mostly on simple or poorly constructed complex sentences. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, subject-verb agreement, and the correct use of articles before attempting more complex grammatical structures.
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