Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-09
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Write about the following topic: Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
Several individuals think that it is better to distribute as much knowledge as convenient when it comes to scientific research, business and the study world while various people's assume that some information are very essential or too significant to be convey freely. This essay will explore many perspective towards sharing information to relevant people and in my opinion major aspects are been shared to the different platform while methodology doesn't transfer easily.
On the one hand, Majority of details are carry on in research paper and study basis which helps to health care system towards bring down enormous disease. There are ideas and methods which can advances various technics and can creates major impact in research fields. To illustrate, an oncology study which is having fundamental information of gene replication of DNA can sustain life cycle of cell and can prevent mutation. With upcoming era of AI , highly prospects of research can accomplished by providing of detail to scientists and professors.
on the other hand, Sharing a crucial information can be disadvantage
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, reaching only 173 words. This significantly impacts the development of the argument. While the essay introduces both sides of the topic and states an opinion, the discussion is severely underdeveloped. The second body paragraph is incomplete, ending abruptly after only one sentence. Consequently, the task is only partially addressed, and the position is not fully supported or extended. To improve, you must ensure you provide full, balanced paragraphs for each side of the argument and conclude with a summary that reinforces your position.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay shows some attempt at logical organization, using phrases like 'On the one hand' and 'on the other hand' to signal structure. However, the progression is interrupted by the incomplete nature of the text. Paragraphing is present, but the final paragraph is truncated, which disrupts the flow of ideas. Cohesive devices are used in a somewhat mechanical way, and the lack of a proper conclusion makes the overall arrangement feel unfinished. To improve, focus on completing your thoughts and ensuring that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence followed by supporting evidence.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary range is limited and often imprecise. There are several instances of awkward word choices, such as 'study world' instead of 'academia' and 'various people's assume' which is grammatically incorrect. Phrases like 'carry on in research paper' are not standard collocations. While the meaning is generally understandable, the lack of sophisticated vocabulary and the presence of errors in word formation prevent a higher score. You should focus on learning academic collocations and synonyms for common words to improve your precision and range.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Examples include 'some information are very essential' (subject-verb agreement), 'too significant to be convey' (passive voice error), and 'major aspects are been shared' (incorrect verb tense). Sentence structures are mostly simple or contain errors when attempting complexity. Punctuation is also inconsistent, such as the lowercase 'on' at the start of the second paragraph. To improve, focus on mastering basic subject-verb agreement and the correct formation of passive voice structures, which are essential for academic writing.
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