Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-11
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Write about the following topic: Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Whereas, others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely.
It is a better way to share the experience with the other persons who are intended to have any experiment either a scientific research or any business and the academic world. All the scientific experiments that has been done before have provided their experimental reports with the consequences and the final results. The world well known scientist Albert Einstein`s laws are in front of of us .We can conclude that the sharing of information is as compulsory as an experiment done before .All the development in the scientific world is the fruit of the shared details of the experiments once done by the world famous scientists. In the business industry, when a newly appointed graduate enters in the industry lacks the experience. He has to struggle had to meet the principles of the business industry and have depths of the techniques to tackle the problematic issues in industries.
In the Academic institutions, there also happens too many problems regarding the management of the staff and the issue that students face while getting education in the different schools, college and universities in the country. If a well experienced person shares his views about how these issues can be tackled and the better solutions are possible for any of the situation.
On the other hand, there are some people whose point of view differs a lot from the previous ones. According to these people, the information must be kept secret and confidential instead of sharing it with the public .
To end up the discussion, I would like to suggest that it is a well mannered way to share the information in scientific research, business and the academic world.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses both sides of the argument, but the development is uneven. While you provide examples for the benefits of sharing information, the counter-argument regarding confidentiality is extremely brief and lacks supporting detail or examples. Furthermore, your own opinion is only stated in the final sentence, which is insufficient for a 'clear position throughout' as required by higher bands. To improve, ensure that each viewpoint is balanced in terms of length and depth, and clearly state your position in the introduction and conclusion.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the logical progression is often disjointed. Transitions between ideas are sometimes mechanical or missing, such as the abrupt jump from scientific research to business and academic management. The use of cohesive devices is limited and occasionally repetitive. For example, the phrase 'in the business industry' and 'in the academic institutions' are used to start paragraphs, but the internal flow within these paragraphs is weak. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring each paragraph has a clear topic sentence would significantly enhance the coherence.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks the precision and range required for higher bands. You rely on basic phrasing, such as 'well known scientist' or 'world famous scientists', which could be replaced with more sophisticated collocations. There are also some awkward word choices, such as 'struggle had to meet the principles', which impede the natural flow of the text. To reach a higher band, focus on using more academic collocations and precise terminology related to research and business ethics.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally hinder clarity. Examples include 'All the scientific experiments that has been done' (subject-verb agreement), 'struggle had to meet' (incorrect verb form), and 'there also happens too many problems' (incorrect existential construction). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with the placement of apostrophes and spaces. While the meaning is generally clear, the frequency of these errors prevents the essay from reaching a higher band.
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